Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.
What might be the reasons for this?
What are the advantages and disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
It is argued that many people nowadays spend most of their lives living near to where they were born, this has become very popular amoung individuals, leading to both positive and negative outcomes.
This essay will discuss the main advantages and disadvantages of this trend, before concluding with final perspective.
On the one hand, a large number of people choose to live close to where they were born and contine living there for the rest of their lives, this trend can lead to many disadvantages. For example, a recent study conducted by Harvard University shows that 90 percent of the third world young population refuse to change their location of living or studing, due to many reasons one of these reasons is religon and family rules. For instance many young females eager to travel and finish colleage outside the country, but due to family rules females are forbiden to leave the country alone without a husband or a male escorte. Therefore, it leads to many negative impact to the young generation and femals specially. Moreover, others choose to live near by their families and work in the same district. this can influned individuals negatively, because they miss the opportunity of exploring the world and traveling overseas, and getting more work opportunities.
On the other hand, many people choose to stay in their home town near their family and friends, live in a calm and relaxing atmosphere leaving the cities and the busy lifestyle for the ones who wants thata kind of lifestyle.
In conclustion, although many people choose to live near by their home town with family and friends, others believe that the only way to live life in to take high risks and leave the comfort zone to a better life in the future.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response addresses all parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for staying in one's birthplace and discussing both advantages and disadvantages. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. The section on disadvantages is more detailed, citing social and cultural constraints, whereas the advantages section is quite brief and lacks specific examples or depth. The position is clear, but the argument could be strengthened by providing more balanced support for the positive aspects of staying in one's hometown, such as community support or financial stability. Overall, the response meets the requirements but remains somewhat superficial in its analysis of the advantages.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or repetitive. For instance, the phrase 'On the one hand' is used, but the corresponding 'On the other hand' is followed by a very short paragraph that lacks a clear connection to the previous points. There are also issues with sentence-level cohesion, such as comma splices (e.g., '...born and contine living there for the rest of their lives, this trend can lead...'). While the progression of ideas is generally logical, the transitions between paragraphs and within sentences could be smoother and more varied.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks range and precision. There are several spelling errors, such as 'amoung', 'contine', 'religon', 'studing', 'colleage', 'forbiden', 'escorte', and 'conclustion'. These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable. The word choices are generally functional but basic, such as 'negative impact' or 'good life'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise collocations and less common lexical items to express your ideas more effectively. The current range is sufficient to convey meaning, but the persistent spelling inaccuracies limit the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there is a lack of control over complex forms. Frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('females are forbiden', 'others... wants thata kind of lifestyle') and punctuation errors (comma splices), occur throughout the text. While the meaning is generally clear, these errors are frequent and occasionally impede the flow of reading. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms. The range of structures is limited, and accuracy is inconsistent.
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