Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.
What might be the reasons for this?
What are the advantages and disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
In persent era child hood membery is main pain part of life . Few peaple spend most of time where they born. there are so many reason I will explain in up coming paragraph. In my opinion there are so many advantage and disadvantage I will explain in below paragraph .
Firstly , In the persent era , if peaple do not move from their birth place .They do not learn struggle and hard time .beacuse nowadays technology is change day by day . It very hard to learn ,they can face problem when they use and also they can miss opportunities because most of companies open their office in big cities and foreign countries .furthermore , migration also help human to face tough time and develop their fighting abilities .which is most important part of success fulllife
Secondly , in the moder era , most of people do not move from their birth place because their parent and child hood friend live that place . They are love their child hood memories. Becouse they can live far from busy life .in the present era, most of peaple run for money .they lost their parents ,friend and childhood memories .noadouth money is important to live this era but we donot ignore our love ones . They always support and stand in bad time
In conclusion ,the main reason is that peaple can not live without their parents and childhood friend that way they live near the birth place . In opinion I am both side .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt, including reasons for staying in one's birthplace and the associated advantages and disadvantages. However, the development of these ideas is limited. The arguments regarding 'struggle' and 'technology' are somewhat vague and lack specific examples to illustrate the points. The conclusion is very brief and does not clearly summarize the main points or provide a balanced perspective as implied by the prompt. To improve, you should expand on your points with concrete examples and ensure your position is clearly articulated throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'In persent era' and 'In conclusion ,the main reason'. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly within the second paragraph where the transition between the benefits of staying and the pressure of money is abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and better sentence-to-sentence connections.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic words like 'good', 'bad', 'people', and 'life'. There are frequent spelling errors such as 'persent', 'peaple', 'beacuse', 'noadouth', and 'success full'. These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the range of vocabulary is not sufficient to express more complex ideas with precision. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning collocations and more academic synonyms for common words.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('most of people do not move'), article usage, and sentence fragments ('Which is most important part of success fulllife'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces placed incorrectly before commas. While the errors do not completely prevent communication, they are frequent enough to cause difficulty for the reader. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common grammatical slips.
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