Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.
What might be the reasons for this?
What are the advantages and disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
It's issue of debate that people should spend most of lives in their home country or not. This essay will highlight the reasons behind this and some merits and demerits into upcoming paragraphs.
To begin with, most of notions like to live in their domestic country due to family. In other words, individuals do not want to leave their family alone because of their health and strong connections .For example: In India, more than 50% people are not move to another place due to family reasons.
Apart from that, some masses are not want to disconnect from their roots .So they always want to stay connected with their culture.
On the other hand , this trend has both advantages and disadvantages. Firstly, Its help to create connection with their roots and history because sometime people move to another nation and they forget about their culture, history, religion and language. On the flip side, if they move to another country they can enhance their financial level and also explore their knowledge about different culture and religion. For instance ,Nowadays most of the student moved to Canada from India, Pakistan and European countries.
In Conclusion, although, there are many reasons of that people like to spend most of lives living close to native country, they should explore another countries for enhance their financial and connections. Even though its far from their birth place.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for staying near one's birthplace and discussing advantages and disadvantages. However, the development is limited due to the brevity of the response, which falls under the 250-word minimum. The ideas are presented but lack sufficient depth or illustrative detail to fully explore the implications of the topic. For instance, the mention of 'financial level' is vague and could have been expanded with specific examples of career opportunities or economic growth. Because the response is under-length, it fails to fully develop the arguments, which impacts the overall score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate, such as 'In other words' used to introduce a new point rather than restate one. The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, and the logical progression within paragraphs is hindered by the limited development of points. While the paragraphing is present, the overall flow is somewhat disjointed, and the use of linking words could be more varied and natural to improve the cohesion of the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There is some repetition of basic terms like 'country', 'family', and 'culture'. Some word choices are awkward or incorrect, such as 'most of notions' instead of 'most people' and 'masses' which is not used appropriately in this context. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated vocabulary and the presence of errors in collocation prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic collocations would be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. Examples include 'most of notions like to live' (subject-verb agreement), 'are not move' (incorrect verb form), and 'reasons of that people' (preposition error). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas. While the writer attempts complex sentences, the control over these structures is weak, leading to frequent errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring consistent verb tense usage throughout the essay.
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