Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.

What might be the reasons for this?

What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Different people have their own perspective about how they want to live their life and where. Some people are of view to spend entire life at the same place or city where they born. This essay will describe advantage and disadvantage of this in detail.

To begin with, There are several reasons why people generally prefer to stay in area close to the place where they born, such as they have sense of security as they know the place since long time, also they might have emotional connection with it because they have spent whole childhood over there , their schools , parks ,friends who are also living there , all these are part of emotional connectivity.

Advantage of living in the same place is they know each and everything about this place and as they are living there for a long time they will get lot of supports emotionally and financially from the local people. For Instance, In case of medical emergency or if they are going through bad phase in their life, they can call anyone for the help and friends and family will stood besides them in tough time.

There are certain disadvantages also, If they are not leaving that area then they might ended up with limited growth in life, not only that but opportunities will also be limited. They will not able to explore the world unless they left that place. Along with this they will not be able to realize what potential they have and what are their limitation. They could be able to provid much better lifestyle to their family.

To conclude, there are both advantages and disadvantages of living in the close place from their birth place. Its completely depends on choice of one individual where he wants to live and how.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt: reasons for staying in one's birthplace, as well as the advantages and disadvantages. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention emotional connections and support systems, the points could be expanded with more specific examples or deeper analysis. For instance, the disadvantage regarding 'limited growth' is mentioned but not fully explored in terms of career or personal development. The position is clear, but the overall depth of the argument is more characteristic of a Band 6, as some points remain slightly underdeveloped.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'For instance', and 'To conclude'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the flow between sentences is slightly disjointed, such as in the second paragraph where the list of items (schools, parks, friends) lacks a smooth transition. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs could be more cohesive to improve the overall readability.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for a higher band. You rely on fairly common, simple phrases like 'good lifestyle' and 'bad phase'. There are also some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'living in the close place from their birth place' and 'they will stood besides them'. To improve, you should aim to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary and ensure that collocations are used accurately to convey your ideas with greater precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'Some people are of view to spend entire life', 'they might ended up', and 'they will not able to explore'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of commas and capitalization after commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to suggest a lack of control over more complex structures, which is a key feature of the Band 6 level.

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