Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.

What might be the reasons for this?

What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Most of the individuals spend their lives living at born place. There are many reasons behind it and i will discussed merits and demerits in upcoming paragraphs.

The major reason to stay for life at same place where they born is memories with place and with people whom they live and make memories with them for a life. Moreover, persons have precious moments with their love ones and with their homes since childhood. The second reason is individuals are addicted with that place where they born because they make that place according to their convenience and their taste. For that , they spend a lot of money as well.

The advantages of living at same place is that if they are living at same place then they have good friend circle in that area which help them in their ups and down . Furthermore, It may be convenient for their workplace distance and they do not worry about their routes of work because they already are habitual about transport service. The disadvantage is less opportunities . If they are not moving to another place then they might missed some opportunities such as health care, education as well as job opportunities. For example, If someone living in village then they have less health opportunities but if he moves to city then he will get better health care because in city, hospitals are nearest to city as compared to village.

In conclusion, although there are many reasons for not leaving their birthplace because of their childhood memories and special moments with family in same place but it will effect their opportunities that will be disadvantages for them.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, including the reasons for staying in one's birthplace and the associated advantages and disadvantages. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation regarding 'addiction' to a place is vague and could have been better supported with more specific examples of lifestyle or cultural ties. While the response covers the requirements, the arguments remain at a surface level, lacking the depth required for a higher band score. The position is clear, but the supporting points would benefit from more detailed elaboration and concrete examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover', 'The second reason', and 'In conclusion', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions feel mechanical, and there are instances where the flow is slightly disrupted by awkward phrasing, such as 'For that , they spend a lot of money as well.' Referencing is generally clear, but the overall structure could be improved by using a wider variety of cohesive links to connect sentences more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision expected at higher levels. There is some repetition of basic words like 'place' and 'opportunities'. Some word choices are unnatural, such as 'addicted with that place' (should be 'attached to') and 'born place' (should be 'birthplace'). While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated vocabulary and occasional collocation errors limit the score. To improve, focus on using more precise synonyms and learning common collocations related to migration and lifestyle.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Examples include 'Most of the individuals spend their lives living at born place' (missing articles and incorrect phrasing) and 'i will discussed' (incorrect verb tense). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. While the meaning is usually understandable, the frequency of errors in basic grammar—such as subject-verb agreement and article usage—prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. More attention to proofreading for basic errors is recommended.

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