Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.

What might be the reasons for this?

What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

One of the pressing concerns widely discussed in the society is that there are numerous people who love to spend their entire life in the vicinity of their roots where they were born due to the connections with their homeland. In this essay, the benefits of migration will outweigh the drawbacks of living in the same community throughout the life.

To commence with, the primary reason of this because of proliferation of generational values and business customs which is required to be followed by the heirloom in the family as a part of conventional traditions. Apart from it, there are multiple other reasons like roles and responsibilities, standard education, unwavering medical facilities, connections built over the years, which are indeed considered to better for their future endeavours.

Nevertheless, change is the spice of life. And to break the monotony of standard living it is essential for people to migrate from hometowns to metropolitan regions which primarily allow autonomy to become an independent person. Moreover, people can broaden their horizons by challenging their interests and creativity. It also helps in enhancing cognitive skills, learnings about cross-culture integration and different linguistic skills thus by providing you with a high esteemed job prospects. To cite an example, nowadays, there are various companies which collaborate with freelancers to elevate their business for profitable exponential growth within a joint venture, by allowing an individual to have exposure to multi-level in their domain.

To recapitulate, it is birth-right of an individual to stay grounded by it's roots however it is pivotal to be adaptive to changes with time as it inculcates encouragement and motivational spirit in a person by fulfilling their desired dreams of living a life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for staying in one's birthplace and discussing advantages and disadvantages. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the reasons provided in the second paragraph are listed rather than explained in depth. Furthermore, the essay's thesis statement in the introduction claims that the benefits of migration will outweigh the drawbacks, but the essay does not clearly contrast these against the benefits of staying, leading to a slight imbalance in the argument. To reach a higher band, you should provide more specific examples and ensure that the advantages and disadvantages of both staying and moving are balanced and clearly linked to the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To commence with', 'Nevertheless', and 'To recapitulate', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions feel mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final sentence where 'it's roots' (grammatical error) and the connection to the previous argument could be smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the internal flow within paragraphs could be improved by using more varied linking words rather than relying on simple list-like structures.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary, including phrases like 'vicinity of their roots', 'proliferation of generational values', and 'cross-culture integration'. There are some attempts at less common lexical items, though some collocations are slightly unnatural, such as 'heirloom in the family' (heirloom usually refers to an object) and 'high esteemed job prospects'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning, there are occasional inaccuracies in word choice that prevent a higher score. Focusing on precise collocations and ensuring words are used in their correct context will help improve your lexical range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. For example, 'The primary reason of this because of proliferation' is grammatically incorrect, and there are issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage throughout the text (e.g., 'it is birth-right of an individual'). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but the sentence structure in the second paragraph is somewhat fragmented. To improve, focus on ensuring that your complex sentences are grammatically sound and that you proofread for basic errors in articles and prepositions.

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