Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.

What might be the reasons for this?

What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is obvious that many individuals spend most of their living with the people who are close to their heart since childhood or birth. The reason being is they are first contact of people who helped to raise a child in proper manner and created memories while played with them. And mostly they are older adults or our villagers. Pros and cons would be discussed in ensuing paragraphs with explanation.

There are many advantages that they grow in rural region sometimes and pampered more. As a result, they felt special and their demand got satisfied by surrounding people. Additionally, we can say that a birthplace would create special position in our heart, as it given too much love and nurture our future. Furthermore, it is kind of comfort zone for everyone to be lived within known people.

Disadvantages are more because when person limits the time with previous people, one cannot grow properly according to advancement. To add to this, at the born time you would immature and wanted few things to survive. But as you grow your hobbies and requirements are changing day-by-day. For that, you need to spend your time with loved one as well as stranger ones. As a result, your professional and personal growth increases.

To sum up all, although there are pros regarding living close to those who are special at born time, you need to interact with strangers too. One should choose diversity in life and leave the comfort zone if require. Everyone should keep in mind whatever good things they learn from villagers or older people. Consequently, use ethics in their life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses all parts of the prompt: reasons, advantages, and disadvantages. However, the development of ideas is limited. The reasons provided for staying near one's birthplace are somewhat vague, focusing on emotional attachment without deep exploration. The advantages and disadvantages are mentioned but lack specific, well-supported examples, relying instead on generalisations. For instance, the discussion on 'advancement' and 'stranger ones' is underdeveloped and lacks clarity. To reach a higher band, you should provide more concrete examples and ensure that your arguments are fully explained rather than just stated. The position is clear, but the overall depth of the response is restricted by the lack of detailed elaboration.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'Additionally' and 'Furthermore', they are occasionally used mechanically or inappropriately, such as 'To add to this, at the born time you would immature'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to follow the logical flow of the argument. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks the necessary cohesion to link sentences smoothly. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word choices, such as 'previous people' instead of 'people from one's past' and 'stranger ones' instead of 'people from different backgrounds'. The use of 'born time' is also non-standard. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of variety and the presence of errors in collocation limit the score. To improve, focus on learning collocations and using more precise terminology to express your ideas, rather than relying on basic or slightly misused vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses, articles, and sentence construction, such as 'The reason being is they are first contact' and 'if require'. Some sentences are fragmented or lack proper subject-verb agreement. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. To improve, you should focus on mastering basic sentence structures and proofreading for common errors like subject-verb agreement and article usage before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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