Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.
What might be the reasons for this?
What are the advantages and disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Nowadays, there are many people who live to live near to were they were born. It has many secyon and cons. Pros and cons as well. I will explain all the things in upcoming parts of the essay.
Firstly, the most and intersting secyon behind this is memory. In detail, person dont not want to forgot the their memory past memory and due to that they would live to spend all their life around the born place. In addition, living at same place or near the place where you born, It can not only help to remide you memory but also it can help you to love the place where you spend your childhood time. The secyon is when people become a older at that time most they can get happiness to see their past time. And during this situation if they will live at same place so the the place can help them to reminde his or her life as a child.
Moreover Apart from that, there are too many advantages have to live at same place. In addition, the people can know the place more dippey and also they can tell their children about the past of the place. To add, person can make good bond with their ne neighbours during lising at same place.
It has some di-negative side as well. The first disadvantage is people can not explor the new things in their life. They can not get a chance to meet new people in their life. Individuely can not learn new language because each and everyplace have their own local language. For exumple, Mr. Patel knew twenty two local language because he spend his life in many diffrent place and due to that he runs his bysiness at ten cities as well.
In conclusion, to live at same place where people born the reyson behind this live reside the past, making good connection around you and so on. However, It has too many disadvantages compare to adrantegs. The most dislike things is people can not get a chance to explor new place, new languge and new people.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses all parts of the prompt: reasons, advantages, and disadvantages. However, the development of ideas is limited. The reasons provided, such as 'memory' and 'happiness', are somewhat repetitive and lack depth. The discussion of advantages and disadvantages is present but remains superficial. For instance, the point about 'knowing the place more deeply' is not fully explained. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments lack the necessary detail and sophistication required for a higher band. To improve, you should aim to expand on your points with more specific examples or logical reasoning rather than repeating similar ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'In addition' and 'To add' are used frequently, sometimes awkwardly. There are issues with referencing; for example, 'The secyon is when people become a older' is unclear in its connection to the previous sentence. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the second paragraph where the transition between memory and childhood is abrupt. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'secyon' (reason), 'intersting', 'remide', 'dippey', 'exumple', and 'bysiness'. These errors occasionally make it difficult for the reader to grasp the intended meaning. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, the lack of precision and the high frequency of spelling mistakes significantly hinder the quality of the response. You should focus on learning the correct spelling of common words and expanding your range of vocabulary to include more precise synonyms for basic terms like 'good', 'bad', and 'things'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement ('person dont not want to forgot'), article usage, and sentence structure ('there are too many advantages have to live'). Many sentences are simple, and attempts at complex structures often result in errors that impede clarity, such as 'the most dislike things is people can not get a chance to explor'. Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, you need to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that you are using correct verb tenses consistently throughout your writing.
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