Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.
What might be the reasons for this?
What are the advantages and disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
IN MODERN ERA MOST COMMUNITY ARE WELL SETTLED IN COUNTRYSIDE . MOST OF PEOPLE SPEND THEIR LIFE WHERE THEY WERE GROW . THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE PROS AND CONS OF LIVING TO PLACE WHERE THEY BORN .
ONE EVIDENT BENEFIT TO LIVE NEAR WHERE YOU BORN IS YOUR CONNECTED TO YOUR LOVED ONES . FOR INSTANCE, IF EVERYONE WILL LEAVE THEIR PARENTS THEY WOULD NOT BE WELL GROWN. ANOTHER ADVANTAGE WOULD BE , YOU ARE ESSAY
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response is significantly under the required word count of 250 words, reaching only 77 words. Because the essay is incomplete, it fails to address the prompt fully. It touches upon the reasons and some advantages, but it lacks the depth and development required for a passing score. The ideas are presented in a very fragmented manner, and the conclusion is entirely missing. To improve, you must ensure you write at least 250 words and provide a balanced discussion of reasons, advantages, and disadvantages with clear supporting examples.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is too short to demonstrate effective paragraphing or logical progression. While there is a basic attempt at an introduction and a body paragraph, the ideas are not developed enough to form a coherent argument. Cohesive devices are largely absent, and the transition between the introduction and the first body paragraph is abrupt. The text lacks the necessary structure to guide the reader through the argument. You should focus on using linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'on the other hand' to connect your ideas logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'well settled' and 'well grown' are used in ways that do not sound natural in English. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'to place where they born' instead of 'to the place where they were born'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas about the topic. You should aim to use more precise terminology related to migration, community, and personal development to improve your lexical range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'most community are' (subject-verb agreement), 'where they were grow' (incorrect verb form), and 'if everyone will leave' (incorrect conditional structure). The sentence structures are simple and lack the variety needed for higher bands. There are also issues with punctuation and capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of verb tenses before attempting more complex grammatical forms.
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