Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.

What might be the reasons for this?

What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It has been observed that many individuals prefer to spend most of their lives at their birthplace because of warmth and affection provided by it. There are several advantages and disadvantage of it. both the merits as well as demerits are elaborate in the following paragraphs with valid reasons and appropriate examples.

The formost reason behind this is that people feel more engaging and comfortable at the place where they born. They are already familier with the place and community surroundings. As a result, they do not need to make too much efforts to be interact with the people. for instance, many eldery people like to live at village because of company, respect and affection it provides.

There are number of advantages of this trend. People can live with their own community with close relatives. Person can get love and attention of their close ones; moreover, they can adjust very effortlessly with surroundings because they familiar with mindsets, traditions and rituals of the place.

They can openly live according to their religion. Consequently life become more easy and convenienet to live. Additionally, people can enjoy their local fastivels as well as retuals. For excample individuals prefer to celebrate their special ocations like wedding or engagement with in community at vallage. People can enjoy more when they are at their birth place.

However, on the other hand it also has many disadvamtiges too. People have faced mamy conflicts when they are live in the same community. There are more chances to become trolled and abused by the relatives. As resut, people become disappointed and depressed; moreover, individuals can not enjoy other religious and traditions. Their life is become stuck at a one place. consequently it creates stress and enxity.

To conclude, mamy people like to live with in the place where they were born because of emmotional attachment and affection towards that place. In rewards they live with their community and enjoy their traditions and company; however,

sometimes it caused conflicts and disputes as resut people sufferd from loneliness and dipression.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt: reasons for staying in one's birthplace, and the advantages and disadvantages. The ideas are relevant, such as emotional comfort and community support, as well as the potential for social conflict. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat superficial. For example, the disadvantages are mentioned briefly without deep exploration of the societal or economic implications. The position is clear, but the overall structure of the argument could be more nuanced to reach a higher band. The conclusion is incomplete, which slightly affects the overall task completion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'consequently', 'moreover', and 'for instance', though some are used mechanically or incorrectly (e.g., 'In rewards they live...'). The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the transition between the advantages and disadvantages is abrupt. The final paragraph is cut off mid-sentence, which disrupts the coherence of the conclusion. Referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences occasionally feels repetitive due to the limited variety of linking phrases.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'formost', 'familier', 'fastivels', 'retuals', 'mamy', and 'dipression'. These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader. While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'community surroundings' and 'emotional attachment', the overall range is limited. The student relies on basic descriptors and struggles with accurate word choice in several instances, such as 'make too much efforts to be interact'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'life become more easy', 'people has faced'), article usage, and sentence construction (e.g., 'They are already familier with the place and community surroundings'). Punctuation is also problematic, with several run-on sentences and incorrect comma usage. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the high frequency of grammatical errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Complex structures are attempted but often contain errors.

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