Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.

What might be the reasons for this?

What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

In this contemporary era, many individuals wants to stay in their hometown instead of migrating to new places. There are several reasons behind this trend despite that it also have few drawbacks which limits many individuals.

Firstly, living to your birth place have great sense of comfortness as person have less struggle to get settled down. For example, if person wants to setup business in hometown, can be done by spending huge time on doing reaserch about market trends as he is already ware about the environment around him. Secondly, parenting and culture are also have major role in this as many fellows avoid to change their location as the are rooted with their culture and emotion despite in adoptiong the new culture at different corner of the world. For instance, people from rich heritage, specially country like India, majority leave with joint family and they tends to take care of their parents as they get support during upbringing as they are emotionally bonded by their tradition.

On the flip side, leaving lives to the same place have few downside as a person will not able to explore the opportunities that are waiting outside. He/she might limit themselves at concentrated place instead of giving a better opportuinities to self which can lead to a great success in their life. Also, after migrating to new location help to understand about new culture which might be make more sense to them. For example, after I moved to Canada, I realised that their are many more sector where I can get specilized and can grow my career into it. As back in my hometown I was only limited to engineering filed but here i can to know about the Architectural engineering in more detailed manner which is my current career.

To conclude, many find stable environment for their start-ups and also take care of their parents in their old age in some tradition but eplaring new place can enables new opportuinities which can have better growth in career.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses all parts of the prompt: reasons for staying in one's hometown, as well as the advantages and disadvantages. The ideas are relevant and generally well-supported with examples, such as the mention of joint family structures in India and the personal experience of moving to Canada. However, some points are slightly under-developed, and the conclusion is a bit repetitive. The position is clear throughout, but the depth of analysis could be improved to reach a higher band by exploring the socio-economic implications of these choices more thoroughly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each with a distinct focus. Cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', 'On the flip side', and 'To conclude' are used to guide the reader through the argument. However, there are instances where the flow is slightly mechanical, and some referencing is unclear, such as the phrase 'despite that it also have few drawbacks which limits many individuals' in the introduction, which lacks a clear antecedent. Paragraphing is used appropriately, but the transition between ideas could be smoother to achieve a more natural progression.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to express ideas clearly. There are some attempts at less common vocabulary, such as 'contemporary era' and 'specialized', but there are also persistent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'comfortness' (comfort), 'ware' (aware), and 'filed' (field). Some phrasing is awkward, such as 'leaving lives to the same place'. While the range is sufficient to convey meaning, the frequent minor errors in word formation and spelling prevent the response from reaching a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the writer attempts complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('many individuals wants', 'living... have', 'many fellows avoid... as the are rooted') and article usage. Punctuation is generally functional, but there are several instances of missing or misused words that slightly impede the flow. The errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding the core message, which is characteristic of the Band 6 level.

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