Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.
What might be the reasons for this?
What are the advantages and disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Some people always spend most of their lifetime in spending time in their hometown. They don't like to spend time and explore in other parts of the world because they have strong family relationships, better comfort zones and emotional stability.
Primary reasons why people stay close to their hometown due to their financial stability where they don't need to spend extra money on rent, also they have strong family relationships where they don't have to leave near and dear one's or sometimes it might be due to family support where they don't have other household member to take care of their dear one's. Secondary reasons is due to comfort zone which they don't want to break and make their life mess.
The advantages are they will have a strong financial stability where they don't need to spend any extra money, also they will have a strong connection to their community. The disadvantages are the limitations it imposes to their personal and professional growth. Staying in one place can narrow an individual's worldview, limited exposure to outside world like diverse culture, food etc. It restricts the cross border career markets available in all major economic hubs. For e.g My cousin, raised in Mumbai, studied in Mumbai and settled in Mumbai where he's happy with his family and parents he don't want to explore bigger opportunities and make the career a better one.
In conclusion, financial stability and emotional support is the major motives of everyone's life once it's not always achieved through cross-border opportunities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt: reasons, advantages, and disadvantages. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention financial stability and comfort zones, the explanation remains superficial. For instance, the disadvantages section touches on personal growth and career markets, but these points are not fully extended or supported with detailed analysis. The example of your cousin is relevant but lacks sufficient depth to fully illustrate the broader implications of the argument. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is expanded with more specific reasoning or illustrative detail to provide a more comprehensive response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. Phrases like 'The advantages are' and 'The disadvantages are' are used as simple signposts rather than creating a smooth flow between sentences. Additionally, some transitions between ideas are abrupt, such as the shift from financial stability to family relationships in the second paragraph. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that sentences are more tightly connected would enhance the overall coherence of the piece.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'emotional stability,' 'cross-border career markets,' and 'economic hubs.' However, there are instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'make their life mess' (should be 'messy') and 'don't have to leave near and dear one's' (incorrect apostrophe usage and phrasing). The vocabulary is generally functional but lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher bands. Focusing on more natural collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing will help improve your lexical score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'he don't want to explore'), incorrect use of articles, and punctuation errors, particularly with apostrophes (e.g., 'one's' instead of 'ones'). While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. You should focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and ensuring that complex sentences are constructed accurately.
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