Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.
What might be the reasons for this?
What are the advantages and disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The number of people prefer to live at their birthplace rather than moving out to other country. This essay will discuss why they want to live in their birthplace .Along with it, the merits and demerits related to it.
People want to live at their birthplace because of their connection with family members. As during any time of trouble or sad moments people can get support from their family or relatives. Moreover, if people live at their birthplace they can easily get a good and comfortable job because of good connections with statesmen and they are familiar with the culture of job. For Example, it is very easy to get job at birthplace due to the relationship made up by our families with professional people. As a result, living at birthplace is more comfortable than moving to any another country.
One of the prime benefits of living at birthplace is people can grow professionally more easily due to familiar culture and language. Furthermore, in emergencies one can take help from family members. Although living at birthplace is easy and convenient, a person has limited exposure to the world. That is to say, person cannot learn and comprehends new culture and languages. If a people move out their birthplace they get to know how to tackle with emergency situation by their own. To illustrate, immigrants of any country tackle with down moments better than people, who continue to live at their birthplace.
To conclude, even though living at birthplace can stronger the relationship with families, people limit their ability to grow further in future.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt: reasons, advantages, and disadvantages are identified. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation regarding 'statesmen' and 'professional people' is vague and does not clearly explain why living in one's birthplace facilitates job acquisition. The ideas are relevant, but the support provided is often repetitive, particularly in the second and third paragraphs where the benefits of family support are restated. To reach a higher band, you should provide more specific, nuanced examples and ensure that each point is fully explored rather than just mentioned.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas from the reasons to the pros and cons. You make use of cohesive devices such as 'Moreover,' 'Furthermore,' and 'To conclude,' which help the flow. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the phrase 'relationship made up by our families with professional people,' which is awkward. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect sentences more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. You rely on basic phrasing such as 'good and comfortable job' and 'sad moments.' There are also some instances of awkward word choice, such as 'statesmen' (which usually refers to high-level politicians, not local professional contacts) and 'tackle with down moments.' To improve, focus on using more sophisticated collocations and precise terminology related to social and professional development. The range is sufficient to convey meaning, but it does not demonstrate the flexibility needed for a band 7 or higher.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'The number of people prefer to live' (should be 'A number of people prefer'), 'comprehends new culture' (should be 'comprehend new cultures'), and 'If a people move out their birthplace' (should be 'If people move out of their birthplace'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are minor errors in article usage and subject-verb agreement throughout the text. Increasing the accuracy of these basic structures is essential for a higher score.
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