Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.
What might be the reasons for this?
What are the advantages and disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In today's globalized world, some people still prefer to stay close to their birth place for whole life. There are several reason that can effects this mind set such as attachment, family business or financial constraints. This essay will explain certain merits and demerits associated with local lifestyle.
One of the main reasons why people spend most of their lives locally is their strong sentimental values attached to that place. Undoubtedly, individuals spend their childhood where they born. So, due to attachment they feel with society and childhood friend made that place most comfortable to them. As a result, moving away from that particular area and surrounding bother them and make uncomfortable. Moreover, family businesses are also another major factors that keep busy. For example, if a person have only business as a income sources they can not move around.
On the one hand, the main advantage of
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the 250-word minimum requirement, which severely limits your ability to develop your ideas. While you identify reasons such as sentimental value and family business, the discussion of advantages and disadvantages is incomplete, as the essay cuts off mid-sentence. To achieve a higher band, you must fully address all parts of the prompt, including providing balanced arguments for both pros and cons, and ensure you meet the length requirement to allow for sufficient development of your points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay shows a basic attempt at paragraphing and logical progression. You use some cohesive devices like 'In today's globalized world', 'One of the main reasons', and 'Moreover' to link ideas. However, because the response is unfinished, the overall structure is incomplete. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that you use a wider variety of linking words to connect your arguments more fluidly throughout the entire essay.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for basic communication, but it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You use some relevant terms like 'globalized', 'sentimental values', and 'financial constraints', but there are errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'birth place for whole life' (should be 'birthplace for their entire lives') and 'made that place most comfortable to them' (should be 'makes that place most comfortable for them'). Focus on learning collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of your writing. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('There are several reason that can effects this mind set') and missing articles or incorrect verb forms ('where they born' instead of 'where they were born'). You rely mostly on simple sentence structures. To improve, practice using a mix of complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses and conditional sentences, and pay closer attention to basic verb tense consistency and pluralization.
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