Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.

What might be the reasons for this?

What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some places is an indispensable part of a person’s life. For this reason, they prefer to live near those areas. There are several reasons for it, as well as there are ample of merits and demerits, which i would like to explain in the forthcoming paragraphs.

Firstly, some people are introvert and they are so comfortable around their childhood friends as well as family. For this reason, they are not willing to leave their comfort place, where they are not worry about making new friends. Moreover, some people are really close to their parents. It is backbone of their life. It makes tough for them to move somewhere without guardians. However, parents already established at place, where their children has born including house, job and relatives. They can not leave all stuffs to move with their kid.

In addition, People mostly know about his born place. It easy for them to find a good job and make a good career. They got family support, which makes their journey really easy. On top of that, they know about every rules and regulation of a place, where they born, because they live over there since their childhood. It saves time, which they can use on their goals compared to the place that they want move, which is new for them.

Furthermore, every part of the world is extremely different than other parts. If they spend their life at one place, It will restrict to develop a person’s perspective towards the world, which makes them narrow minded.

In conclusion, some people are very close their parents, and introvert, which restrict them to leave their born place. They got family support as well as people can easily establish own self at that place, where they live since childhood. However, It makes people narrow minded.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt: reasons for staying in one's birthplace, as well as the advantages and disadvantages. The ideas are relevant, such as the comfort of familiar social circles and the career benefits of local knowledge. However, the development is somewhat limited; for instance, the point about parents being 'backbone of their life' is underdeveloped and lacks clear explanation. The conclusion is a bit repetitive and does not fully synthesize the arguments presented. To reach a higher band, you should aim to expand on your points with more specific examples or deeper analysis of the implications of your arguments.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Moreover', 'In addition', and 'Furthermore' to signal transitions. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as 'For this reason' appearing twice in the first two paragraphs. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'It makes tough for them to move somewhere without guardians.' The progression of ideas is generally logical, but the flow between sentences could be smoother to improve the overall readability.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on basic terms like 'good job', 'good career', and 'stuff'. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'some places is an indispensable part' (subject-verb agreement error) and 'establish own self'. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'introvert' and 'perspective', the range is limited. To improve, focus on using more precise synonyms and collocations, and ensure that your word choices are appropriate for a formal essay context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('some places is', 'children has born'), missing articles ('every rules'), and awkward phrasing ('where they are not worry about'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization and comma usage. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. You should focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy, especially verb tenses and pluralization.

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