Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.
What might be the reasons for this?
What are the advantages and disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Some people prefer to live near the place where they were born. People are emotionally connected with that place as they know lots of people around place. The main benefit is that they can make a closer relationship with people who live nearby from many years. However, lack of exposure is the main drawback.
The main reason for not leaving place where they born is that people are emotionally attached with the place where they born. This is because they spend important part of their life at that place. Throughout their life, they make many friends and they do not want to loss them. For example, many people do not consider job opportunity outside their area because they do not want to loss their friends. Therefore, people prefer to live nearby area where they born.
The main benefit of living nearby places where they born is that people can live around known people. They can make good connection with them and enjoy their life. If people are in trouble, their friends can help them. However, the main drawback is that sometimes they loss career opportunities. For example, many times, people get job opportunities to earn more money if they move to another place. They often reject it. As a result, they are not able grow in their career.
To conclude, some people are emotionally attached with the place where they were born as they build good connections there. They could help when people face trouble in their lives. However, sometimes they loss greater career opportunities because they do not accept relocation.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt: reasons for staying, advantages, and disadvantages. However, the development is somewhat repetitive. For instance, the idea of 'emotional attachment' is mentioned in every paragraph, and the examples provided are quite generic. To reach a higher band, you should expand on the 'reasons' by discussing cultural or economic factors beyond just emotional ties, and provide more specific, nuanced examples. The position is clear, but the depth of analysis is limited, which keeps the response at a Band 6 level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'The main benefit', 'However', and 'To conclude' to signal transitions. While the flow is generally easy to follow, the progression of ideas is somewhat mechanical. Some referencing is slightly repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'the place where they were born'. Improving the variety of cohesive links and using more sophisticated referencing would help the essay flow more naturally and move into the Band 7 range.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely heavily on simple phrases like 'make a closer relationship', 'good connection', and 'loss career opportunities' (note: 'loss' is a noun; the verb is 'lose'). There is little evidence of less common lexical items or idiomatic language. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and synonyms to avoid repetition. For example, instead of repeating 'place where they were born', you could use 'hometown', 'native region', or 'place of origin'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentences, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Common issues include article usage (e.g., 'at that place' instead of 'in that place'), verb forms (e.g., 'do not want to loss' instead of 'lose'), and missing prepositions. While these errors do not prevent communication, they are persistent. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct usage of verbs versus nouns. Increasing the variety of complex structures, such as conditional sentences or relative clauses, would also help improve your score.
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