Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.

What might be the reasons for this?

What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Place of born hold significant importance in everyone's life. It allows them to connect with their roots and belongingness. There are many people in the world who have never left their hometown due to several reasons. This essay will discuss about this development and its benefits and drawbacks.

There are many reasons of why some people are not able to relocate to the other city. Many people in the world are struggling with finance and due to not having enough money, they could not think about moving to the other city. Additionally, there may be language barrier as they are living in the same place for long period of time and they have only learned their local language which makes it difficult for them to move. Few group may feel afraid to move to another city as there are multiple challenges linked to the relocation.

First and foremost advantages of staying nearby birth place is the familiarity. As they are living in the same area for long period of time, they knew their surroundings and people nearby them which gives them sense of security and inner motivation to stay with them and help them when difficult situations arrived. They often live nearby their parents to give them emotional support in their late age.

Conversely, they can not receive any worldwide exposure. It has been seen that in some cases, growth of one city is significant while another town failed to grow. Therefore, they can not take any benefits. Despite the fact that another place is growing, they often enjoy their lives staying in the same place.

To sum up, it is individuals choice whether they would like to relocate or not but relocation often offer more advantages to them financially and help them to improve their individual growth.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt: reasons for staying, advantages, and disadvantages. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the reasons provided (finance, language barriers) are mentioned but not fully explored or supported with specific examples. The advantages and disadvantages are identified, but the discussion remains quite general. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your points with more detailed explanations or concrete examples. For example, when discussing the lack of 'worldwide exposure,' you could explain how this limits career progression or personal development in a more specific way.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Additionally,' 'First and foremost,' and 'Conversely' to signal transitions. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly repetitive. Furthermore, there are instances where the flow between sentences could be smoother; for example, the transition between the reasons for staying and the advantages could be more fluid. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the overall progression of ideas is clear enough for the reader to follow your argument without difficulty.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to express your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'relocate,' 'worldwide exposure,' and 'emotional support.' However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'Place of born' (should be 'Place of birth'), 'not able to relocate to the other city' (should be 'to another city'), and 'few group' (should be 'some groups'). To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that your word forms are accurate. The range of vocabulary is sufficient but lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the other city'), subject-verb agreement ('Few group may feel'), and verb tenses ('they knew their surroundings' should be 'they know'). Punctuation is generally functional, but some sentences are slightly awkward due to these grammatical slips. To improve, focus on proofreading your work for basic errors in articles and verb consistency. Increasing the variety of complex structures while maintaining accuracy will help you achieve a higher score in this criterion.

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