Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.

What might be the reasons for this?

What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Place of birth hold significant importance in everyone's life. It allows them to connect with their roots and sense of belonging. There are many people in the world who have never left their hometown due to several reasons. This essay will discuss this development and its benefits and drawbacks.

There are many reasons of why some people are not able to relocate to another city. Many people in the world are struggling with finance supports and due to not having enough money, they could not think about moving to another city. Additionally, there may be language barrier as they are living in the same place for long period of time and they have only learned their local language which makes it difficult for them to move. A few group may feel afraid to move to another city as there are multiple challenges linked to the relocation.

First and foremost advantages of staying nearby birth place is the familiarity. As they are living in the same area for long period of time, they knew their surroundings and people nearby them which gives them sense of security and inner motivation to stay with them and help them when difficult situations arrived. They often live nearby their parents to provide emotional support in their late age.

Conversely, they can not receive any worldwide exposure. It has been seen that in some cases, growth of one city is significant while another town failed to grow. Therefore, they can not take any benefits. Despite the fact that another place is growing, they often enjoy their lives staying in the same place.

To sum up, it is individuals choice whether they would like to relocate or not but relocation often offer more advantages to them financially and help them to improve their individual growth.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt: reasons for staying in one's hometown, as well as the advantages and disadvantages. The ideas are relevant, such as financial constraints and familiarity, but they are somewhat under-developed. For example, the point about 'worldwide exposure' is mentioned but lacks specific examples or a deeper explanation of how this impacts personal growth. The position is clear throughout, but the development of arguments could be more extensive to reach a higher band. Overall, the response provides a sufficient overview of the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'First and foremost', 'Conversely', and 'To sum up', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions are a bit mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'There are many reasons of why' or 'A few group'. Referencing is generally clear, though the flow between sentences could be smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the overall progression of ideas is logical, meeting the requirements for a band 6.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to express ideas clearly. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary, such as 'relocation' and 'worldwide exposure', but there are also some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'finance supports' instead of 'financial constraints' and 'A few group' instead of 'A few groups'. While these errors do not impede communication, they limit the range and precision of the language used. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the intended meaning but lacks the flexibility required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('Place of birth hold', 'A few group may feel'), article usage ('the language barrier'), and tense consistency ('they knew their surroundings'). While these errors are frequent, they rarely impede the reader's understanding. The writer demonstrates an attempt at complex structures, but the control over these is inconsistent. To improve, the writer should focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles.

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