Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.
What might be the reasons for this?
What are the advantages and disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
According to some individuals living their life nearby those area where they born and brought. The reason behind this and some possible pros and cons will be describe in upcoming paragraphs.
First reason behind this is emotional attachment with spot. To explicate this, some people are very emotional in the term of their born place due to this they always try to live close to birth place. Secondly, due to the narrow mind they do not like to leave that place. To explain this, still their are many human who follow their forth father ritual never leave the brought up place.
In addition, it has some benefits. Living near where they born gives them to celebrate festivals with friends and family. Moreover, individuals who live near that area never feel unsafe or learn to navigation of new town and all because they already familiar with their neighbours and area.
On the otherhands, they did not have chance to make a new friends. To elaborate this, if they deny to move new place they will lose a opportunity to make new connections or friends which gives deliver new knowledge with them. Furthermore, they did not get a chance to participate with different culture way of life as well as festivals. When people choose to live vivid are which totally different from their birth place, it will gives opportunity to celebrate or participate in their special occasion.
To sum up, due to narrow mind thinking level or emotional nature they living close to where they born. They can be a part of their festivals at any time but they lose to try some other cultural activity, too.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response successfully addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing the reasons why some people stay in their birthplace alongside the advantages and disadvantages. In the introduction, the writer outlines the essay's direction. The reasons provided include emotional attachment and traditional mindsets. The advantages covered are social connections, family support, and a sense of safety, while the disadvantages include limited opportunities to make new friends and experience diverse cultures. However, some ideas lack deep extension and tend to over-generalise, such as attributing staying solely to a 'narrow mind'. Overall, the task is adequately answered, placing the response solidly in the band 6 category for task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is arranged with a clear overall structure, featuring an introduction, body paragraphs for reasons, advantages, and disadvantages, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is utilised appropriately to separate ideas. Cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', 'In addition', and 'On the other hands' are used to connect sentences and paragraphs, though some transitions feel a bit mechanical or repetitive. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as pronoun usage referring back to previous clauses. Despite these minor issues, the logical organisation is clear enough to guide the reader through the text without major confusion, corresponding to a band 6 level.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, demonstrating an attempt to incorporate less common items such as 'emotional attachment', 'cultural activity', and 'opportunities'. However, there are notable word-choice errors, incorrect collocations, and awkward phrasing throughout the text, such as 'nearby those area where they born and brought', 'in the term of', and 'forth father ritual'. Spelling mistakes also appear, such as 'otherhands' and 'vivid are'. While these lexical inaccuracies and awkward expressions are noticeable and sometimes strain the reader, meaning is generally conveyed, aligning with the descriptors for band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors involving verb tenses, articles, and prepositions, such as 'where they born and brought', 'will be describe', 'they did not have chance', and 'it will gives opportunity'. Subject-verb agreement is also problematic in several instances, such as 'some human who follow... never leave' and 'it will gives'. These frequent errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader and prevent the text from reaching a higher band, placing this criterion at a band 5.0 level.
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