Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.
What might be the reasons for this?
What are the advantages and disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
some individuals spend most of their life living close to the place where they are born. there can be many reasons for it like their parents doesn't want their kids to go far away from them or they are scared or think that cannot manage without their parents. there are many advanages and disadvantages to it.
so firstly, there are many advantages to a children sholudn't get worried to that individual will not get food ,clothes and shelter. their parents will provide every needs of their children and can help to get thing wich they wish to bought.if they get ill or meet with any uncertainities their parents will be next to them and help them to get better by health or get rid of it. there are many examples to these conditions for example: if a person is living with their parents they don't need to work for thereselves they will get better food clothes and shelter. if they get ill their parents will take them to hospitsals and get them medications .
there are many disadvantages to this situation. their children may lack in many qualities . if a person starts to live far from their parents they get to know about the world in which we are living. if they live far from their parents where noboody know them helps them to manage their life on their own to manage money which get to spend from their parents and when they get ill they get medicine on their own helps to become independent.
according to my opinion, a teenager after 18 shoudn't be living with their parents. individual should be starting to living on their own believe me it is going to teach them many lessons of life which cannot teach them by books.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing reasons why people stay close to their birthplace, alongside the advantages and disadvantages. A clear personal position is presented in the final paragraph. However, the ideas are relatively basic and lack full development. For instance, the explanation of advantages focuses almost entirely on financial and physical support from parents (e.g., getting food, clothes, and shelter), and the discussion of disadvantages remains somewhat repetitive and general. While all prompt requirements are met, the reasoning requires greater depth and extension to reach a higher band level, placing this response comfortably at Band 5.5 to 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The essay displays a basic overall progression, utilizing standard cohesive devices such as 'firstly' and 'according to my opinion' to structure the response. Paragraphing is attempted, though the division between paragraphs is sometimes awkward, and the opening paragraph is very brief. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the pronoun use in 'their children may lack in many qualities' without a fully established antecedent. While the structure is coherent enough to follow without difficulty, the mechanical use of transitions and occasional lapses in logical connection prevent the text from achieving a Band 7 score. Overall, the organizational features are adequate for a Band 6.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the student to express basic ideas about living with parents and independence. However, the range is quite limited and repetitive, with frequent reliance on basic terms like 'parents', 'children', 'life', and 'food'. There are also several noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'uncertainities' instead of emergencies, and 'wich they wish to bought' instead of 'which they wish to buy'. Spelling mistakes like 'advanages', 'sholudn't', 'noboody', and 'hospitsals' are present throughout the text. These errors do not completely impede communication, reflecting the characteristics of a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There is a complete lack of capitalization at the beginning of sentences and for the pronoun 'I'. Numerous grammatical errors are evident, including subject-verb agreement issues ('their parents doesn't want'), tense inconsistencies, and awkward phrasing such as 'a children sholudn't get worried to that individual will not get food'. Complex structures often contain errors that cause difficulty for the reader. Although the meaning can generally be deciphered, the frequency of errors places this performance firmly in the Band 5 category.
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