Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.
What might be the reasons for this?
What are the advantages and disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Most of the people spend their time of life by living close to where they were born
this is because of their love with their home town and their relatives
most of the the live in thier home town to complete their school education
after the school education most of the people move another cities or another country for the higher education
But on the other side many people do not go anywhere for education or something else this is because of their attachment with their parents and with therit hometown or birthplace
their are too much things in thish process such a way when people or a student leave theirbirthplace and move into another place for the higher education or for work
they also face two much diffulities and too much things they have to face in an otherplace reather then in own hometown
most of the people spend their most of time close to where they were born
they do not want to go in any other place for work or study because of their love with their hometown or they want to work in their own hometown
Theire are too much advantadges or aslo disadvantages
the advantages are such they a person in their own hometown is he work or study he do not have any cost of living or eat
whilw on the other side a person who is far from home towm he have too much things to manage too much diffulities to face
In my opinion people should have to go far from thier hometown or bornplace
they should have opportunities to learn hoe to live life
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing the reasons why people stay close to their birthplace, alongside the advantages and disadvantages of doing so. The candidate covers emotional attachment to hometowns and relatives, as well as financial benefits versus limited exposure. However, the ideas are somewhat repetitive and lack detailed development or specific examples. Phrases like 'they have too much things to manage' show limited extension of arguments. While a position is stated in the conclusion regarding moving away, the overall development is rather basic. This performance aligns best with the Band 5 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text lacks proper paragraphing and is presented as a single dense block of text, which severely hinders logical flow and progression. Cohesive devices are largely absent or repetitive, with excessive reliance on conjunctions like 'and' or repetitive transition phrases such as 'most of the people' and 'this is because of'. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the lack of punctuation makes it difficult to follow the transition between ideas. Although there is a discernible progression from reasons to advantages and disadvantages, the mechanical structure and absence of paragraph breaks place this at Band 4.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic, repetitive, and restricted to everyday terms such as 'home town', 'family', 'work', and 'study'. There are frequent word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'love with their home town' instead of 'attachment to' or 'love for', and 'eat' instead of 'food' or 'subsistence'. Words are also misspelled repeatedly, including 'thier', 'diffulities', 'therit', 'inthis', 'reather', and 'advantadges'. The range is minimally adequate for the task, but lexical limitations and spelling errors restrict the score to Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The writing demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Punctuation is entirely absent throughout the text, resulting in run-on sentences and a complete lack of terminal full stops or commas (e.g., 'Most of the people spend their time of life by living close to where they were born this is because of...'). Simple sentences are prone to frequent errors in subject-verb agreement and preposition use, while complex structures are either absent or entirely faulty. The frequency of structural and grammatical errors significantly impedes comprehension, matching the Band 4.0 descriptors.
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