Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.

What might be the reasons for this?

What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In today's life people preferd to live their life where they were born. This idea influenced by family resposibilites, comfort zone and feeling loved by living close to our loved one. Every idea or decision take both merits and demerits along with it. While you lived with your loved one make you feel whelming on other side it took some important oppourtunities from our life. Today i will discuss merits and demerits of this idea in upcoming paragraphs.

To start with,First and foremost thing that comes in my mind is family responsibility which is priority of every individual. Taking care of our elder, parents, children and siblings put a great impact to live close where they were born. In addition with, safety from crime, theft and other vurgler things in todays hectic era is the one other reason make sure that no one hurt our close ones. Other things that matter beside emotional effects is financial sittuation. Sometimes individual is not financially stable in their life, spending and costly living make them feel to live in their hometown rather than well developed areas. Most vital thing is mental stabillity, an individual always care peace, love and life far from crowd and hectic lifestyle, this could be a one more reason that people feel to live close to their birth place.

Moreover, if we look other side of coin, people leave many oppurtunities in their life such as high earning jobs, great designations and many more thing which can raise their living standars. Further more, they also leave an exposure of world where they grab experience how feel live outside and other cities or country works. They left learning that how people from other religion, cast, region and race spend their life in daily rouotine. This looks same as a field bacteria, which born in same field and died in same and never get exposure of outer world. As we learn from very small age that human is social animal, while people who never leave their birth place remain stuck from social exposure of life where they can make friends and sometime find a perfect match for their life.

In the end, there are both side of this idea but i think that people have their own choices and they have ability to think what is benificial and worse for them. Living close or far from their loved ones is their personal choice and work accordingly to their needs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both questions: family responsibilities, safety, finances and a preference for a calmer lifestyle are offered as reasons, while the discussion of advantages and disadvantages includes emotional closeness and missed work and social opportunities. Your view that the choice depends on individual needs is clear in the conclusion. However, the advantages are less fully developed than the disadvantages: feeling loved is mentioned in the introduction, but the body does not explain its practical or emotional benefits in detail. Some points, such as safety and financial circumstances, are also asserted rather than supported with a specific example. Develop each main idea with a brief explanation or relevant example to make the response more balanced and convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure, moving from an introduction to reasons, disadvantages and a conclusion. Paragraphing helps the reader follow these stages, and signposts such as “To start with” and “Moreover” make the main shifts visible. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some of the flexibility associated with stronger cohesion. However, transitions can feel mechanical, and several ideas are crowded into long paragraphs without clear internal grouping. For example, the reasons paragraph moves from family care to safety, finances and mental stability in quick succession. Group related points and use clearer links to show how each supports the central argument; also make references such as “this idea” more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “family responsibility,” “financially stable,” “mental stability,” “exposure” and “opportunities.” These choices show an effort to discuss more than basic ideas. However, noticeable spelling errors and inaccurate word combinations reduce precision and sometimes make the reader pause. Examples include “preferd,” “oppourtunities,” “living standars,” and “safety from crime, theft and other vurgler things.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “leave an exposure of world” and “a field bacteria.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations rather than adding uncommon wording: for instance, describe “greater exposure to different cultures” and “higher-paying jobs.” Proofreading spelling and word forms would make your meaning clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at longer, more complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “which,” “where” and “while.” This gives the response some structural variety. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction recur. For example, “This idea influenced by…” is missing a verb, while “Every idea or decision take” has a subject–verb agreement problem. In “While you lived with your loved one make you feel…,” the clause does not form a complete grammatical sentence. There are also run-on sentences and inconsistent capitalisation. Practise building accurate sentences around one main clause, then add subordinate clauses; check verb agreement and ensure every sentence has a complete subject and verb.

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