Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.

What might be the reasons for this?

What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays,life is too fast moving.Everyone has responsibility,either you are well-known person or normal personal.In this modern era numerous people are moveing from one place to another place for a good career.

While some people want to spend their time where they were born.Spending most of their time where you were born but there are some advantages or disadvantages in this essay i will elabortae this topic and i will give my opinion.

On the one hand,I firmly believe that moveing from one place to another place its not easy.Many people moved some of for study or work. Mostly people wants to live their live close to where they are worn,Although most of them want to explore new world.Exploring a new places is a great,its gives life time memories.In addition they explore their culture, food,tradition.

On the other hand, People are emotionally connected. They lives their life close to where they were worn.

There are many factores could be a reason they are afraid to go out of the city and taking new challenges.

Any how leaveing your born place its not easy.Staying same places so longer its not give mentally challenge.you can live your life freely and happley.Those people who are living with their family they get family support from parents.And they dont want live in nostaligia time. Because where you were born its always special and a great memories for all life time.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that in this era lots of competition going on but still some of them choose their life where they were born.You need a guts of take this decesion.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both the reasons people stay near their birthplace and some advantages and disadvantages, but the coverage is uneven and several ideas are only briefly stated. Emotional attachment and family support are relevant reasons, while fear of leaving the city and taking on challenges is another possible explanation. You also mention exploring new places and cultures as a benefit of moving, and suggest that staying may limit mental challenge. However, the discussion does not clearly separate the advantages and disadvantages of staying, and some points are difficult to interpret, such as “they dont want live in nostaligia time.” Your position is not consistently clear. Develop each side with a specific explanation or example and make the comparison explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an introduction, body paragraphs and a conclusion, and phrases such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand” and “In conclusion” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, ideas are not arranged in a clear progression: the first body paragraph shifts between moving being difficult, staying, and the benefits of exploring elsewhere, while the next paragraph combines emotional ties, fear, family support and nostalgia. Some links are unclear, and repeated references to moving between places do not always show how one point relates to the next. Plan separate paragraphs for reasons, advantages and disadvantages, then use clear topic sentences and connect each supporting explanation directly to its main idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “career,” “explore,” “culture,” “tradition,” “family support” and “challenges.” This gives you a basic range for discussing the topic. However, vocabulary is often repetitive or inaccurately chosen, which sometimes makes meaning unclear: “normal personal,” “explore a new places,” and “nostaligia time” are examples. Spelling errors such as “moveing,” “elabortae,” “factores” and “decesion” also reduce clarity. Aim to use precise phrases for the task, such as “remain in their hometown” and “emotional ties,” and check spelling and word forms carefully. Avoid repeating “one place to another place” when a concise alternative is available.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “Although” and a reason introduced by “Because.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement and articles frequently make the writing difficult to follow. For example, “Many people moved some of for study or work” is not a complete, clear construction, and “They lives their life” has agreement and number problems. “Staying same places so longer its not give mentally challenge” also contains several grammatical errors that obscure the intended point. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. Check agreement, articles and punctuation, especially where you join two complete ideas.

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