Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.

What might be the reasons for this?

What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this concurrent world, a signifiant amount of individuals like to spend their lifespan in thier hometown . It could either they are attached to their home town or could be their families recide there. However, this situation make them feel homesick throughtout. this essay will cover both positive and negetive aspects.

There are several advantages of living in home town as an individual know their locality more better and know how things works. Moreover, in most of the cases, thier extended families also share same cities and get together on special events. For instance, a study from the university of Niagara showes that people who live in thier home town are more happier than those who left their home town in early age. The home that an individual is living in since childhood give more cosy vibes.

There are more disadvantage of living out of home town. To begin with, people feel homesickness that means they absolutely miss thier loved once as they move for good opportunity in different city. Futhermore, the food that are available in thier home town is not as same as other cities. A good authentic resturant could be an option but it will not taste same. A recent article named 'immigration struggle' from a famous magazine showed that people who leave their home town in betterment of thier lives start feeling homesickness after a year of not meeting thier loved once.

To conclude, There could be more positive aspects and negetive aspects to this but an individual who left thier home town should visit back home once a year to socialize more.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the reasons people stay near their birthplace, mentioning attachment to home and family, and you identify advantages such as knowing the locality and being close to relatives. However, the response only partially answers the task: the reasons are briefly stated rather than explained, and the disadvantages paragraph mainly discusses homesickness and food, which are not clearly disadvantages of staying near one’s birthplace. The essay also shifts between staying in one’s hometown and leaving it, so the central comparison is unclear. The examples attributed to a university study and a magazine are not explained or connected convincingly to the claims. Develop relevant reasons and balance the advantages and disadvantages of remaining close to home more directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and basic signposting such as “Moreover,” “For instance,” and “To conclude” helps show the intended structure. However, progression is limited because the ideas within paragraphs do not consistently support the task. In particular, the paragraph introduced as disadvantages discusses the experience of leaving home, while the essay is about people who stay near where they were born. Some links are also mechanical or unclear, and the conclusion introduces advice about visiting home rather than summarising the main points. Make each paragraph focus on one clear aspect of the question and use references and transitions to show how each idea connects.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “hometown,” “extended families,” “locality,” and “homesickness,” and you attempt phrases such as “authentic restaurant” and “betterment of their lives.” However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make the writing less clear, for example “signifiant,” “recide,” “negetive,” and “loved once.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise: “spend their lifespan” and “cosy vibes” are not well suited to this formal essay, while “know their locality more better” is awkward. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms for employment, social ties and local familiarity would help explain the relevant ideas.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a sentence beginning “For instance” and one using “that means.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. Examples include “It could either they are attached” (missing a suitable clause structure), “this situation make them feel” (subject–verb agreement), and “The home … give” (agreement). There are also problems with articles, plurals and punctuation, such as “in home town,” “There are more disadvantage,” and the lowercase start of “this essay.” Practise building accurate complex sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and proofread agreement, articles and sentence boundaries.

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