Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.

What might be the reasons for this?

What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people spend most of their life to live in their birthplace. This essay will have both the advantages and disadvantages.

In begin with, there are many advantages to spend their life in their birthplace because people make close bond to their families, neighbourhood and relatives. They know about their local markets, cultures and traditions. Moreover, they want to live in familiar atmosphere. They are automatically connected with their families. The families give supports and love to their children. The adorable love does not allow the children to go away from their parents. For illustration, the life got busy but children took time to spend with their families.

Furthermore, they celebrates festivals together which shows the love and signs to live together. To live in birthplace the neighbours also supports each other in bad time and show encourage to do something good. To live together they know about the feelings, emotions, values and loves for the families. In addition to, it learns how to save money to live with family. It also learns how to make relations and maintain it.

There are few disadvantages to live in birthplace. It has fewer job opportunities and less choices of education. To live in same place it reduces the chances to make successful. It also decreases the experiences level and opportunities of business.Moreover, lack of skills can also put impact on future or job opportunities. For example, the developed cities children have more sources of job opportunities and experiences as compared to others.

To sum up, to live in their birthplace, it learns the value of relations and how their families support in difficult stuation. But if there has a lack of job choices and experiences than they would move for their future and goals.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses both requested areas: it gives reasons for staying near one’s birthplace, such as family ties and familiarity, and identifies disadvantages including fewer job and education options. The conclusion also recognises that people may move to pursue future goals. However, the advantages dominate, while the reasons and disadvantages are not developed evenly. Several points repeat the value of family support, and examples such as “children took time to spend with their families” do not clearly demonstrate the wider claim. The essay’s position is present but not fully shaped into a clear, balanced answer. To strengthen the response, explain how family responsibilities, affordability, or local connections encourage people to stay, then develop each disadvantage with a specific consequence or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, paragraphs on advantages and disadvantages, and a conclusion. Sequencing is generally understandable, and signposts such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore,” and “To sum up” help readers follow the main sections. However, progression within the advantages section is sometimes repetitive: family bonds, support, love, and shared festivals are presented as separate points without a clear hierarchy. Some links are also awkward or unclear, particularly “To live together they know about the feelings” and “In addition to, it learns.” The introduction promises both advantages and disadvantages but does not establish a clear overall position. Group related ideas, use pronouns with clear referents, and make each paragraph develop one central point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “birthplace,” “neighbourhood,” “traditions,” “job opportunities,” and “experiences.” This gives the reader enough context to understand the main ideas. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated or used in unnatural combinations, such as “make close bond,” “familiar atmosphere,” “show encourage,” and “experiences level.” Word-form and spelling problems, including “stuation,” also reduce accuracy. Aim to learn vocabulary in natural collocations and choose more precise terms rather than repeating “live” and “families.” For example, describe people as having “strong ties” to relatives or facing “limited employment prospects.” These changes would make the argument clearer and more fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The essay attempts some longer sentences and uses basic linking structures, for example, “because people make close bond to their families” and “if there has a lack of job choices … they would move.” However, the range is limited, and errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and verb forms occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to interpret. Examples include “Some people spend most of their life to live,” “they celebrates festivals,” and “The families give supports.” The final sentence, “if there has a lack,” also shows an inaccurate conditional structure. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. Check subject–verb agreement, countable and uncountable nouns, and the structure of conditional sentences during editing.

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