Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.

What might be the reasons for this?

What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, majority of people are prefer to lives living close to their childhood place. Nostalegic memories and helping neighbour are the main reeasons of this trend and there are some disadvantages of this trend like know about another culture as well as less facilities.

There are some reasons why people are lives living close to where they were born as they have some nostalegic memories of their childhood. They spend many years at born place where they play with their childhood friends and spend time with their older people who are no more. Moreover, most of people have good options for take help from other people when they need. For instance, a perosn is living in the rural ares from their childhood and their cousin family are living next door to his or her house, during any time their cousin's family help his or her during emergency.

However, there are several drawbacks of this trend but one prominent is lack of facilities. As, people are living at that place where they are born they have not too much facilities. For example, a person is living in rural area and there is lack of both medical and education system. To get these facilities he or she have need to go to cities which is time consuming. Furthermore, people are living at one place from their birth to till now they do not have too much knowledge about other country's not only culture but also traditions. If people are moved to another places they have good opportunity to learn about other's lifestyle.

In conclusion, people are lives living to place where they are born beacuse off good memories from their childhood and it is good during emergency as well as lack of facilities and knowledge are the disadvantages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both questions: you identify nostalgic attachment and support from nearby relatives as reasons, then discuss limited facilities and reduced exposure to other cultures as disadvantages. The rural example about a cousin helping in an emergency makes one reason concrete, and the medical and education example explains the facilities point. However, the advantages are not clearly set out as a separate part of the response; support from neighbours and relatives is implied rather than explicitly evaluated as an advantage. The cultural point is also broad, and the response does not explain how staying near one’s birthplace affects opportunities beyond this. Develop each side more evenly and make the advantages explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph explaining reasons, a paragraph on disadvantages, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “However,” and “Furthermore” help signal the movement between ideas. The progression is generally understandable, although the introduction and conclusion combine several points without clearly distinguishing reasons from advantages and disadvantages. Some connections are also mechanical, and references such as “they” and “that place” can make it less clear who or what is being discussed. Use topic sentences that identify each paragraph’s purpose, and connect examples directly to the claim they illustrate. This would make the organisation more precise while retaining its coherent structure.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “nostalgic memories,” “facilities,” “emergency,” “medical,” and “traditions.” These choices allow the reader to understand the main ideas, but the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make the expression noticeably awkward. For example, “childhood place” and “born place” are not natural ways to describe someone’s hometown, while “good options for take help” does not express the intended idea idiomatically. Spelling errors such as “Nostalegic,” “reeasons,” and “perosn” also reduce accuracy. Build a bank of natural phrases for family ties, local services, and cultural exposure, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “as,” “where,” and “if,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, control of sentence structure and verb forms is inconsistent. For example, “majority of people are prefer to lives” combines incompatible verb forms, and “people are lives living” recurs instead of a correctly formed present-tense clause. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “As, people are living…” and “a person … their cousin family are living.” Practise building accurate basic clauses first, then add subordinate clauses. Check subject–verb agreement, verb patterns, and punctuation when revising.

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