Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.

What might be the reasons for this?

What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It has been observed that few people spend maximum time near to their birth place and do not migrate to any other area. The reason is that they want to keep connected to their roots where they actually belongs to. There are few merits but many demerits of this.

On the one hand, if anyone wants to stay connected to the culture especially the religion, than staying in the same city or country for the rest of their lives would be really helpful. Similarly, those people who obeys family and neighbourhood values do not prefer to leave their motherland. For instance, Any techincal degree holder from third world country like Pakistan would not choose to migrate to any first world country like America or England, even if thier occupation is in demand. The main reason for not opting migration would be up bringing of his/her childerns will be not the same in the western countries. Other than this, Patriotism also plays a vital role in staying back in the country where they were born. Every patriortic person would perfer to serve for their own nation instead of living far away from the place one belongs to with negligible existance.

On the other hand, in this fast moving world where competition is getting harder day by day. Everyone wants to make progress and get stablished. Among the third world countries such as in Pakistan, it is quite difficuilt to achieve an extraordinary life with every basic facility where people struggle to get clean water or 24/7 electricity. There is no infrastructure at all in the city and law and enforcement condition is worse than ever. Due to all these reasons, most of the people who they are actually capable of making it to the established first world country sacrifices on their culture and migrate from Pakistan. For example, many people leave their family at their primary residency and shift to the Gulf countries such as Dubai and Saudia Arabia for better income. They bear the long distance relationship but eventually become able to feed their families and complete all their desires.

A holisitc view of this topic describes that the disadvantages of living near to the birth place overweigh the advantages of it. Certainly, for those who are financially strong and are capable of fullfilling the domestic requirement has the edge to stay in the home country. While for those who are not stable should take a risk by migrating to any other country to make their lives better in every aspect.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response addresses both questions: it gives reasons for staying near one’s birthplace, including cultural and family ties and patriotism, and discusses benefits and drawbacks through examples of remaining at home or migrating for work. The concluding view—that the disadvantages of staying outweigh the advantages—also makes the writer’s position clear. These relevant points meet the task well, and the examples about Pakistan and Gulf employment help illustrate them. However, the advantages of staying are less fully explained than the disadvantages, and some claims are broad, such as suggesting that a technical graduate would not migrate because of children’s upbringing. To strengthen the response further, develop the benefits with a specific consequence or example and qualify generalisations.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph explaining reasons for staying, a paragraph focused on the drawbacks of staying and the appeal of migration, and a conclusion. The contrastive signposts “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” make the main stages easy to follow. Within paragraphs, however, some connections are mechanical or unclear. The second body paragraph begins with a sentence fragment-like construction, “On the other hand, in this fast moving world where competition is getting harder day by day,” before the main point arrives. The shift from reasons for staying to disadvantages is also not always explicit. Use complete topic sentences that directly signal each paragraph’s purpose, and make references such as “this” or “these reasons” point clearly to the relevant idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses a reasonable range of topic vocabulary, including “culture,” “patriotism,” “infrastructure,” “migration,” and “long distance relationship,” so the main ideas are generally understandable. It also attempts more formal expressions such as “a holistic view” and “plays a vital role.” However, inaccurate word choice, collocation, and spelling are noticeable and sometimes make the writing less natural: “maximum time,” “up bringing,” “get stablished,” and “negligible existance” do not express the intended meanings clearly or idiomatically. Several phrases are also repetitive, particularly references to “first world” and “third world” countries. Build accuracy by learning common collocations and checking spelling, and choose more precise terms such as “developed countries” where appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional and relative structures, as in “if anyone wants to stay connected to the culture” and “those who are financially strong.” Most of the argument remains understandable despite some grammatical errors. Agreement and verb forms need more consistent control: “where they actually belongs” should use a plural verb, while “those people who obeys” has a similar mismatch. Other examples include “the upbringing … will be not the same” and “people who they are actually capable,” where clause structure or word order is faulty. The sentence beginning “On the other hand, in this fast moving world…” is not a complete sentence. Review subject–verb agreement, clause construction, and sentence boundaries, then proofread complex sentences to ensure each has a clear main clause.

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