Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.

What might be the reasons for this?

What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Living a better life is most of all people wants not in todays world but, when the life started. Here we will disccus people where they born they spend their hall life , so There are many pros and cons of this mindset.

To begin with, however, all most many people born in there native place where their parents or grandparents lived. In this mindset they also live their entire life with making father's business and married , making kids. So , basically they do not want to move out in their comfort zone . whichever . I personally believe in that too, because they can not let go people ground them there they born and grown up

Furthermore , there is some disadvantages of that as well to spend entire life where they born. For example , in most of the countries have villages or countryside. In this scenario, people can not make their future in small villages and they can not study further as well because of lake of technologies. In addition , some residents step out in their comfort zone for the bright future . They will go and study hard , doing jobs and making business . However , they can not forgot the place where they born and grown up . After all the success in life they visit once and few in their native place spend some time with family and revive memories. Although living life when we are is ok but stepping out and make future is giving best satisfaction in life.

in conclusion, advantage of live their life where they born and grown up it is easy but for the future coming out it is a big courage to let go comfort zone .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both the reasons people stay near their birthplace and some consequences, mentioning family ties, inherited businesses, familiarity, and limited opportunities in villages. However, the response only partially fulfils the task: the reasons are not clearly separated from the advantages, and the advantages are less developed than the disadvantages. For example, “they do not want to move out in their comfort zone” suggests a reason, but you do not explain in detail what staying offers beyond familiarity and family contact. Your position is also difficult to follow, particularly when you say you believe in staying but later emphasise leaving for a brighter future. Develop each part with a clear explanation and a specific example, and state your view consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, body paragraphs and a conclusion, and expressions such as “To begin with,” “Furthermore” and “In conclusion” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, the overall progression is not always clear: the first body paragraph mixes reasons, family life and your personal view, while the next moves between disadvantages, migration and returning to visit. Some linking phrases do not accurately signal the relationship between ideas, and references such as “this mindset” and “they” can be unclear. The conclusion repeats the comfort-zone idea rather than bringing the main points together. Give each paragraph one clear purpose, order supporting points logically, and use linking words only when their relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “native place,” “countryside,” “technologies,” “bright future” and “comfort zone,” so the reader can identify the main subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, which sometimes makes meaning difficult to follow. For instance, “people ground them there they born” does not clearly express the idea of family or community ties, and “revive memories” is not a natural phrase in this context. Spelling errors such as “disccus,” “hall” and “forgot” also reduce accuracy. Build a bank of natural phrases for migration, family ties and local opportunities, and check spelling and word forms when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “where” and “although.” However, the range is limited, and complex attempts are often faulty; frequent errors can make the reader work to understand the intended meaning. Examples include “all most many people born,” “they can not forgot,” and “advantage of live their life … it is easy,” where verb forms, sentence structure and agreement are not controlled. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, as in “So ,” and the mid-sentence capitalisation of “There.” Practise building accurate sentences around one main clause, then add a subordinate clause. Check subject–verb agreement, past participles and sentence boundaries during revision.

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