Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live.
Write an email to your friend. In your email
- describe where you lived when you were a student at the university
- recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation
- warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your email as follows:
Dear ..........,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Rosy,
I hope you are doing well!
I would like to let you know about how to choose the right to live. Firstly, I would greatly appreciate your efforts to find the suitable place to live. Before started to live somewhere I would like to share my personal experience to you. Moreover, when I was a student I lived in the world most beautiful city is called Vancouver also the city of dreams. Furthermore, my university is just one kilometer away from my house and I will also suggested you to live around the city. Because it is extremely easy for you if you do not have any transport vehicle. In addition, if you want to find the best place to live not just surviving just go to the university portal and you will find out the accommodation for students it is cheapest and easiest way to find good place. In the conclusion, never trust on links or pages that is shared on Whatsapp groups because when I was a student I got scammed so that all see you soon my love.
I hope you will give your prompt attention and consideration.
Thank you,
Deep
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response addresses all three bullet points of the task: describing your past accommodation, recommending a search method, and providing a warning. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the description of where you lived is quite brief and focuses more on the city than the actual housing type. The advice to use the university portal is clear, but the warning about scams could be more detailed to fully satisfy the 'well-developed' requirement of higher bands. The tone is generally appropriate for an email to a friend, although the closing is slightly abrupt and formal in its phrasing.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The email is organized into a single block of text, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Moreover', and 'In addition', their usage is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural in context. Paragraphing is essential in IELTS writing to separate distinct ideas; here, the lack of paragraph breaks between the introduction, the three required points, and the conclusion negatively impacts the flow. To improve, ensure each bullet point is addressed in its own paragraph to guide the reader through your advice clearly.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using phrases like 'prompt attention' and 'personal experience'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'choose the right to live' instead of 'choose the right place to live' and 'transport vehicle' which is redundant. Some phrasing is also slightly unnatural, such as 'not just surviving'. While your meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, and there are recurring errors that prevent a higher score. Focusing on more natural collocations will help improve your lexical precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Examples include 'Before started to live' (should be 'Before starting'), 'I will also suggested' (should be 'I would also suggest'), and 'never trust on links' (should be 'never trust links'). Additionally, there are issues with article usage and verb tense consistency. While the errors do not completely obscure the meaning, they are frequent enough to suggest a lack of control over complex structures. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct verb forms will significantly improve your accuracy.
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