Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live.

Write an email to your friend. In your email

• describe where you lived when you were a student at the university
• recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation
• warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your email as follows:

Dear ..........,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear John,

Hope this letter finds you in pink of your health. I am writing this letter to inform you about a suitable apartment which is near at the university.

I am immensely pleased that you achieved a seat in Alberta University. I lived in an apartment for almost three years while studying in same university. This apartment has major facilities which is required as a student such as privacy, security, electricity and furniture. I would like to suggest that you should not avoid to ask about parking space, entrance timing and the monthly charges when looking for the accomodation. There are numerous online websites which can provide videos to represent the rental properties. Moreover, I believe that personal tour to the apartment can be a great choice before finalising any property.

Most of the time children selected the apartment because of its unique ambience. It is a major drawback but should get detail information about a property. Sometime owners do not allowed entry of more people and it is better to to clarify it to avoid further problems.

I hope you would take my suggestion into your consideration and act accordingly.

Warm wishes,

Arpan.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: describing your past accommodation, recommending a search method, and warning about common mistakes. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the warning section is slightly confusing, as you refer to 'children' selecting apartments, which seems like a misuse of vocabulary rather than a relevant student experience. To improve, ensure that your advice is clearly linked to the student experience and provide more specific details to fully develop your points, such as explaining why a personal tour is beneficial beyond just saying it is a 'great choice'.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The email is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'Most of the time' to link sentences. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the third paragraph where the connection between 'children' and the 'major drawback' is confusing. The paragraphing is appropriate for an informal email, but the flow between sentences could be smoother to achieve a higher band. Overall, the message is easy to follow despite these minor issues.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'ambience', 'finalising', and 'accommodation'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors. For example, 'in pink of your health' is an incorrect idiom, 'achieved a seat' is unnatural (should be 'got a place'), and 'children' is used incorrectly to refer to students. Additionally, there is a spelling error ('accomodation'). To reach a higher band, focus on using more natural collocations and ensuring that your vocabulary choices are precise and contextually appropriate for a letter to a friend.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the accuracy of your writing. Examples include 'near at the university' (should be 'near the university'), 'major facilities which is required' (subject-verb agreement error), 'do not allowed' (tense error), and 'better to to clarify' (repetition). These errors do not impede communication, but they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tense usage will significantly improve your accuracy.

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