Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live.

Write an email to your friend. In your email

• describe where you lived when you were a student at the university
• recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation
• warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your email as follows:

Dear ..........,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear John,

I hope you are doing well. I got information from our tuition sir that you have been enrolled in york university, and looking for the accomodation to live. I would like to offer you some suggestions on how to look for the perfect place to live in canada as per my experience.

When I was student in the same university, I was living in an apartment that was walking distance from the college. It was named as an fountain head, and I perferred to stay their because this condo's are only for students studying at York University, also I saved my time in travelling; which help me to utilize this time for focusing on my assignments.

I would recommend you to find place in this apartment through facebook marketplace, or from the help desk of college; since they have references.

I would also give you an advice to the place, especially before transferring deposit; as this is common type of fraud in Canada. Also, know about all housemates because sometime people are difficult to handle, which will not allow you to focus on your studies

Kind regards,

Binal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you describe living in a student apartment near the university, suggest Facebook Marketplace or the college help desk, and warn about paying a deposit before checking the property and about difficult housemates. The personal detail that the location saved travel time and helped you focus makes the accommodation description relevant. However, the recommendation is brief and does not explain how to assess listings or compare options, while the warnings could be more specific—for example, checking a rental agreement and verifying who receives the deposit. The email is appropriately directed to a friend, but a little more development of these practical suggestions would make the advice more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The email follows a sensible sequence: an opening, your own experience, a recommendation, and cautions before the sign-off. Paragraphing helps the reader identify these stages, and links such as “When I was student” and “I would recommend” signal the shift between ideas. Some connections are less clear or feel mechanically joined, particularly the long sentence about the apartment, travel time, and assignments, where a semicolon and “which” make the relationship awkward. The final warning also combines checking the property and learning about housemates without a clear transition. Separating these points and using more precise references would make the progression smoother and more controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main advice, including “apartment,” “Facebook marketplace,” “references,” “deposit,” and “housemates.” There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “walking distance” and “focus on my assignments.” However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “accomodation,” “perferred,” and “their” appear where “accommodation,” “preferred,” and “there” are needed. Some expressions are also unnatural, including “got information from our tuition sir” and “offer you some suggestions … as per my experience.” Choose more idiomatic phrases and check spelling and word forms carefully; this would make the vocabulary more accurate and natural without changing the friendly tone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a reason clause explaining that the apartment saved travel time and a sentence beginning “since they have references.” The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “When I was student” needs an article, “I was living” is less suitable than a simple past form for this completed period, and “these condo’s are” has problems with demonstrative agreement and plural formation. The sentence ending “which help me” also needs subject–verb agreement, while the semicolon before “which” is not used effectively. Review articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, then divide longer sentences to improve control.

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