Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living.

What is your opinion about this?

What other time in history would be interesting to live in?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

One school of thought belives 21st century provens to be the best living era for human being because of advanced technology and artificial intellegent, while other belives past had healthy lifestyle beacuse of better as well as clear environment.

To begins with, in today's time everthing runs on the tip of your finger from fan to computer as advancement in technology made easy life for human beings. First and formost, in past it used to take months to receive a message via post, while now it takes seconds with just the tip of the finger. Moreover, now world is too advanced in health sector as it takes few days to make a cure for deadly virus such as COVID 19 which saves thousand of lives across the world. To add to this, as we introduced new machinery in the health sector such as CT scan, X-ray machine, MRI, makes it easy to evalute the indepth problem in a human body which can be identified and cure in a timeframe. However, because of the techonology people have become lazy as they are more tends to sedentary activity which creates obesity which is becoming the alerting crisis among the adults.

Other belives, life in mid 90s were the best time a human being lived as world war 2 was over and people started living a normal and peacefull life again. 20th century was the begining tellivison industry as people were shocked and amaze at the same time after seeing visual presentation of a story on a plain glass. Peopls wake up early and intent to join the spritual activity and following the daliy rituals. Furthermore, in past all the jobs requires you to be physical available at work to perform task, unlike today concept of work from home is ruining the people's health.

To conclude, technology made our life easier than we though but at the cost our health, while lifestyle in 90s were simple but suitable of human body.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions and present a broadly balanced view: modern technology improves communication and healthcare, while an earlier period offered a healthier, simpler lifestyle. The examples of rapid messaging, medical scans and post-war life are relevant. However, your own opinion is not stated clearly enough at the outset; the opening mainly reports what “one school of thought” and “other” people believe, and the conclusion compares the periods without firmly saying which you consider best. Some points also need fuller explanation: for example, the claim that work-from-home is “ruining” health is asserted rather than supported, and the reference to the 1990s and the end of World War II is historically unclear. State your position directly and develop fewer examples more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph on the present, a paragraph on the past, and a conclusion. Sequencing expressions such as “To begin with,” “Moreover,” “Furthermore” and “To conclude” help readers follow the discussion, and the contrast between the two periods is apparent. This meets the lower-band expectation of an organised response and shows some flexibility in linking ideas. However, transitions can feel mechanical, and the opening sentence introduces opposing views without clearly connecting them to your own position. Some links between claims are also abrupt—for instance, the discussion moves from medical technology to sedentary behaviour without explaining the contrast. Use clearer topic sentences and make the relationship between each example and your main argument explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of topic vocabulary, including “advanced technology,” “health sector,” “sedentary activity,” “obesity” and “spiritual activity.” These choices allow you to discuss both technological progress and lifestyle. However, the range is limited by repeated general words such as “life,” “past” and “people,” while several inaccurate word choices or collocations make parts less clear, including “the tip of your finger,” “make a cure,” “physical available” and “alerting crisis.” Spelling errors such as “belives,” “intellegent” and “techonology” are also noticeable. Build accuracy by learning common word partnerships and checking spelling; for example, say “at the touch of a button,” “develop a treatment,” and “a growing health crisis.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, using clauses with “while,” “as,” “which” and “because,” so there is some structural variety. The main ideas are generally understandable, but errors recur in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction. Examples include “To begins with,” “other believes,” “life in mid 90s were,” and “all the jobs requires.” The long sentence beginning “To add to this” also has an unclear structure: the list of machines is followed by “makes it easy,” without a clear grammatical subject. Try shorter, controlled sentences when presenting examples, and check that subjects and verbs agree and that each clause has a complete structure. More accurate control of these patterns would make your complex sentences easier to follow.

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