Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living.
What is your opinion about this?
What other time in history would be interesting to live in?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Today is the best time in history to live because of advanced medicine, global communication, and higher standards of living.
Health and Medicine, Modern vaccines and trratments cure deadly , leading to longer and healthcare lives.
Technology and Comfort,The internet provides instant access to information, and modern conveniences make daily work easier.
Safety and Travel, Global travel and modern infrastructure connect people and places faster than ever before.
The Renaissance, This era was a time of great art, science, and cultural rebirth.
Why it is interesting, People witnessed the creation of masterpieces by artists like Leonardo da Vinci and the early steps of modern science.
The tradeoff,Life was much harder, and basic comforts or modern healthcare did not exist.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The student attempts to address both parts of the prompt, identifying the present era as the best time and selecting the Renaissance as another interesting historical period. However, the response is presented entirely in a fragmented, note-taking format rather than fully developed paragraphs. Furthermore, the length requirement has not been met, as the response contains only 119 words, falling significantly short of the 250-word minimum. Due to severe under-development and under-length, the task is only addressed in a minimal fashion.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text lacks proper paragraphing and cohesive devices, relying on disjointed headings and bullet-like fragments rather than connected prose. Phrases like 'Why it is interesting' and 'The tradeoff' act as pseudo-headings rather than logical transitions within a coherent essay structure. Because the information and ideas are not arranged in fully cohesive paragraphs with clear progression, the organizational framework fails to meet standard essay criteria.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a basic vocabulary with some relevant terms like 'advanced medicine', 'modern conveniences', and 'masterpieces'. However, there are noticeable vocabulary and spelling errors, such as 'trratments' instead of treatments, and 'healthcare lives' instead of healthy lives. The lexical range is quite limited due to the brevity of the response, and repetition of basic terms restricts the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The submission lacks full sentence structures, consisting almost entirely of fragmented noun phrases, isolated lists, and dependent clauses. For example, 'Health and Medicine, Modern vaccines and trratments cure deadly , leading to longer and healthcare lives' is grammatically incomplete and contains missing objects and faulty word forms. Because there is an absence of a sustained mix of complex sentence forms, grammatical range and accuracy cannot be credited at a higher level.
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