Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sami,

I picked your letter from in floor of my house when i get in, you want advice ether you go collage or try to get a job. In my opinion, going on work is best but its completely upto you and i ask some question which helps you to choose what is beneficial for you.

If you thing going collage gives something about your aim or a practicle work in the field then you should go there to improve yourself for better future conversaly the sitution is completley opposite soo quit it better.

On the other side, geting a job is much better option than study according to your sitution. As i know you are the elder son in family and your parents are older day by day.

Doing this is feeling better for your parents. and you earn some money to support as a financial.

You have a experienced in hopital as a receptionist, you should make a updated resume about your relative field and previous job experienced mentioned on that cv. Visit three to four hopsital drop there your resume and wait for a interview to getting a job. From my perspective this job is suitable for you as you have experienced.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the three requested points and make your preference for employment clear: you say a job is “best,” explain that Sami could support his parents financially, and recommend hospital receptionist work based on his experience. These are relevant, personalised reasons. However, the explanation of why he would not enjoy college is unclear and conditional: “If you thing going collage gives something about your aim…” does not clearly explain what he would dislike or why. The job advice is more developed, but the suggested steps to update a CV and visit hospitals take space without adding much about why this work suits him. Develop the college point and support your recommendation with clearer reasons tied to Sami’s interests and circumstances.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter has a recognisable structure: an opening that introduces the advice, separate paragraphs for college and employment, and a final paragraph suggesting a suitable job. This helps the reader identify the main points. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, particularly in the college paragraph, where the conditional idea and “conversaly the sitution is completley opposite” do not connect clearly. Linking phrases such as “On the other side” and “From my perspective” are used, but some transitions feel mechanical or do not clarify the relationship between ideas. The sentence about supporting his parents also shifts abruptly into “Doing this is feeling better.” Organise each paragraph around one clear point and use more precise links between the reason and its explanation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “advice,” “financial,” “resume,” “receptionist,” and “interview,” and the reader can generally understand your recommendation. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes meaning unclear. For example, “going on work” is not a natural way to express choosing employment, and “support as a financial” does not convey the intended meaning clearly. There are also frequent spelling errors, such as “collage,” “sitution,” “hopsital,” and “experianced.” These issues fit a level where vocabulary is minimally adequate but noticeable errors can cause difficulty. Build accuracy by learning common phrases for education, employment, and giving advice, and proofread spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional opening to the college paragraph and a reason introduced with “As i know.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to interpret. For example, “I picked your letter from in floor of my house when i get in” has problems with prepositions and tense, while “If you thing going collage gives something about your aim” lacks a clear grammatical structure. Other examples include “Doing this is feeling better for your parents” and “you earn some money to support as a financial.” Sentence boundaries and capitalisation also need attention. Practise building clear subject–verb sentences first, then check tense, articles, and punctuation before adding longer clauses.

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