Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sam,

I hope you are well. I received your letter last week owing to my busy schedule I cannot reply and you want advice regarding whether to go to college or to try to get a job.

I believe that you would not enjoy going to college because you may find theoretical subjects boring and too much academic pressure will create trouble for you. The another reason is high tuition fees and your father is facing business lose and if you will start job than you can retrieve your fathr's stress level on some extent.

if you start work than you can financially independent and gain practical experience which also improve future career opportunities. You can also develop communication skills, co-ordination ability, leadership skills and so on.

You are confident person so you can start work from customer service in any sector such as retail, restaurant, receptionist and sale assistant. You are very polite, humble and kind than you can easily survive in these sectors.

I am looking forward to your feedback.

Yours sincerely,

Kiran

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points and make your recommendation clear: you argue that college may be boring and stressful, explain that work could provide income and experience, and suggest customer service, retail, restaurant, reception and sales roles. The reasons are relevant, and the reference to your friend’s father’s business difficulties makes the advice personal. Some points, however, are less fully developed: explain more specifically why academic study would not suit Sam, and connect his personal qualities to particular roles rather than listing several jobs. The letter also has an appropriate opening and closing. To strengthen it further, develop the advice with one or two concrete examples of how a suitable job would benefit him.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a coherent overall arrangement: it opens with a personal greeting, gives reasons against college, explains the benefits of employment, and then suggests suitable work. Paragraphing helps distinguish these main points, and phrases such as “The another reason” and “if you start work” signal relationships between ideas. However, some connections are awkward or unclear, particularly the long opening sentence, which joins the delayed reply and the request for advice without clear punctuation. The repeated use of “than” to introduce consequences also makes the progression feel mechanical. Use clearer sentence boundaries and a wider range of natural links, and make references such as “these sectors” more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for giving personal advice, including “theoretical subjects,” “academic pressure,” “practical experience,” and “communication skills.” These choices help convey your main ideas, and the reader can generally understand the intended meaning. However, several word-choice, collocation and spelling problems reduce precision: “business lose,” “retrieve your fathr’s stress level,” and “survive in these sectors” are not natural expressions in this context. There are also spelling errors such as “co-ordination” and “sale assistant.” Aim for accurate, natural phrases rather than adding lists of skills, and check spelling and word forms carefully. This would make your vocabulary more controlled and appropriate to a friendly letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including explanations with “because” and a conditional idea beginning “if you start work.” The overall message remains understandable, but errors in sentence construction and verb forms are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause. For example, the opening joins two independent ideas without suitable punctuation, while “if you will start job” uses an incorrect conditional form. Other examples include “you can financially independent” and “which also improve,” where the verb structure or agreement is faulty. Practise forming conditionals with a present-tense clause and a clear result, and check articles, verb forms and sentence boundaries. More accurate control of these patterns would improve clarity.

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