Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

DEAR ANGELIE,

HOPE THIS LETTER FINDS YOU IN RADIANTS HEALTH AND BEST OF SPIRTS. YESTERDAY I RECEIVED YOUR LETTER WHERE I READ THAT YOU ARE BIT CONFUSED WHETHER YOU SHOULD GO BACK TO COLLEGE OR DO A JOB AFTER YOUR RN COURSE. HONESTLY, I WOULD NOT RECOMEND YOU TO GO TO COLLEGE AS YOU ALREADY SPEND ALMOST 5 YEARS IN COLLEGE. INSTEAD OF GOING TO COLLEGE YOU NEED TO DEVELOP HAND ON EXPERENCE IN YOUR FIELD BY WORKING IN HOSPITAL OR LTC.

GETTING A JOB IS A BETTER IDEA AS YOU WILL BE ABLE TO PRACTICE WHAT YOU HAVE LEARNED IN COLLEGE AND I ALSO SAW ONLINE THERE IS ONE NEW LTC OPENED. THIS LTC COMES UNDER DURHAM REGION THEY, PAY ALOT BETTER THAN ANY OTHER PLACE WITH BETTER BENIFTS. MY SUGGESTION TO YOU WILL BE TO APPLY IN THEIR NURSING DEPARTMENT AS THEY ARE ACTIVELY HIRING NURSES AND YOU ALSO MEET THERE REQUIRMENT.

HOPEFULLY, YOU WILL FIND MY ADVICE USEFULL . HOPE YOU MAKE THE BEST DECISION FOR YOURSELF.ALL THE BEST.

LOVE,

SUZI

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points and make your recommendation clear: you advise Angelie to work rather than return to college. You explain that she has already spent nearly five years studying and could gain practical experience, then recommend applying to the nursing department of a newly opened long-term-care facility. These details make the advice relevant and personal. However, the explanation of why she would not enjoy college is less fully developed: you focus mainly on the time she has already spent there, rather than explaining what aspects of further study might not suit her. The job advice could also be supported with more detail about why nursing or long-term care matches her interests and qualifications.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: an opening that responds to your friend’s question, a paragraph explaining your recommendation, and a closing with encouragement. The progression from college to employment and then to a specific workplace is easy to follow. You also use linking expressions such as “Instead of” and “as” to connect ideas. This already gives the letter a coherent structure, but some connections are awkward or unclear, particularly “I also saw online there is one new LTC opened” and “This LTC comes under Durham Region they, pay…”. Separate these ideas into complete sentences and use clearer references, such as naming the facility again or explaining what “they” refers to. More natural paragraph transitions would make the flow smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “RN course,” “hands-on experience,” “nursing department,” and “actively hiring,” which helps communicate practical advice. There is also some attempt to use more specific language about the workplace and its benefits. However, spelling errors such as “recomended,” “experence,” “benifits,” and “requirment” are noticeable, and some phrases are not natural or precise, including “radiants health,” “one new LTC opened,” and “pay a lot better than any other place.” These choices sometimes make the reader pause, even though the main meaning remains understandable. Check spelling carefully and choose standard collocations, especially when describing the facility, its pay, and its benefits.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple sentences and longer structures to explain your advice, for example, “Getting a job is a better idea as you will be able to practice what you have learned in college.” The main message is generally clear, but some grammatical errors affect accuracy. In “you already spend almost 5 years,” the verb form should reflect completed time, and “whether you should go back to college or do a job” needs a more natural parallel construction. The sentence beginning “This LTC comes under Durham Region” runs into the next clause without suitable punctuation, while “you also meet there requirement” has an unclear grammatical relationship between the subject and the requirement. Aim to separate long ideas into complete sentences and check verb forms, articles, and clause boundaries.

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