Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Drear Aman,

Thanks for your letter. Iam glad that you asked for advice whether to go to college or try to get a job. Personally,I suggest you to get a job.

Firstly, I don't think you would enjoy going to college because, you are already very good in baking. I suggest you choose baking as you career and do more practical practice at your home rather than spending long hours in college. Moreover, college education is expensive.

On the other hand, getting a job would be good idea for you. You can start earning and become financialy independent. Furthermore you can help your parents with that money. And in future you can start your own bakery.

I can suggest you several jobs like receptionist, customer sales representative but according you have to go with baking.

I hope you you find my advice helpful.

your's truly

Divya

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You give a clear recommendation to get a job and address all three requested points. The reason college may not suit Aman—his baking ability, preference for practical experience, and the expense—is relevant, while earning, helping his parents, and eventually opening a bakery explain the benefits of work. You also suggest several job types. However, the job suggestions are not fully aligned with your main advice: receptionist and customer sales representative are mentioned briefly, then you say he should choose baking, without explaining what baking-related work he could seek. The reasons and suggestions are therefore not equally developed. The response is also four words below the required minimum. Add a little detail, especially about suitable bakery work and why it fits him.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall shape: an opening recommendation, paragraphs explaining college and employment, and a closing. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “On the other hand,” and “Furthermore” help the reader follow the main points, and the ideas progress logically from advice to reasons. This meets the lower-band expectations securely and shows some features of stronger organisation. To make the flow more natural, avoid relying on formulaic transitions and connect related points more smoothly. The final paragraph, for example, lists two unrelated roles before returning abruptly to baking; explain the relationship between these options or focus the paragraph on bakery work. Also use consistent letter conventions in the sign-off, with a capitalised closing and appropriate punctuation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for communicating the advice, with relevant terms such as “financially independent,” “practical practice,” and “bakery.” You also attempt to express ideas beyond basic preference, including future plans and helping his parents. However, several word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors make the language less natural: “choose baking as you career,” “customer sales representative,” and “according you have to go with baking.” “Iam,” “financialy,” and “Drear” also show spelling or spacing problems. These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your main message, but they limit precision and polish. Aim for more natural phrases such as “gain hands-on experience” and “a job in a bakery,” and proofread carefully for spelling and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple sentences and some longer structures, including the reason clause in “because, you are already very good in baking” and the future possibility “you can start your own bakery.” The message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors occur in sentence construction, articles, and punctuation. For example, “I suggest you to get a job” needs a different verb pattern, and “getting a job would be good idea” is missing an article. The comma after “because” is unnecessary, while “I hope you you find” repeats the subject. Try varying sentence forms while checking these patterns: “I suggest that you get a job,” “a good idea,” and “I hope you find my advice helpful.”

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