Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Yash,

I am writing this letter to give you suggestion, which you asked me in your previous letter. I will advise you should get a job.

To begin with, as you told me you do not find theoretical knowlegde interesting. Also, the universities are far away from your house and it takes 2-3 hours to commute there. Thereofore, you are not able to focus on your study and do not get enough sleep.

Furthermore, money is crucial for your family because no one is earning in your family. So, you should look for a job, which gives you sufficient remuneration. Additionally, if you sttart earning at this young age, you will save a lot of money and can gain more experiences.

I will recommend you should join any construction unions as you are very fit and have an interest in infrastructure projects. The union will provide paid training and offer high wage.

I hope you like my advise and if you need more guidance from my you ask without hesitation.

Yours lovingly,

Ravi.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three points and make your recommendation clear from the opening: “I will advise you should get a job.” The reasons are relevant and supported with personal details, including your friend’s dislike of theoretical study, the long commute, and the family’s need for income. You also suggest construction work and connect it to his fitness and interest in infrastructure, adding the benefits of training and wages. This gives the letter a clear purpose and extends the main ideas. To make the advice more fully developed, explain more specifically why college would be unenjoyable beyond the commute and theoretical content, and name a couple of suitable roles within construction rather than referring generally to a union.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression: you state your advice, explain why college may not suit your friend, give financial reasons for working, and finish with a job suggestion and a friendly closing. Paragraphing supports this sequence, and linking expressions such as “To begin with,” “Furthermore,” and “Additionally” help readers follow the points. The ideas within each paragraph are generally connected, particularly the link between the family’s financial situation and the value of earning. Some transitions feel formulaic, however, and the final sentence is difficult to follow because “if you need more guidance from my you ask” does not clearly express the intended relationship. Use a more natural closing transition and make references between clauses explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task and includes some topic-specific choices, such as “theoretical knowledge,” “commute,” “remuneration,” “paid training,” and “infrastructure projects.” These help convey the reasons for your advice. However, several word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems reduce precision: “give you suggestion” needs an article, “construction unions” may not mean the employer or workplace you intend, and “gain more experiences” is not the natural form in this context. There are also spelling errors in “knowlegde,” “sttart,” “Thereofore,” and “advise.” Aim for accurate, natural combinations and proofread carefully; a few well-chosen alternatives would be more effective than formal-sounding words used imprecisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses with “because,” “as,” and “if,” and the main message remains clear. Some grammatical errors occur, especially in sentence patterns and clause construction. For example, “I will advise you should get a job” needs a structure such as “I would advise you to get a job,” while “I will recommend you should join” should be revised to “I recommend that you join” or “I recommend joining.” In the closing, “if you need more guidance from my you ask” is missing a clear grammatical structure. Review verb patterns after “advise” and “recommend,” and check that each conditional clause has a complete, clearly linked main clause.

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