Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear friend,

I hope you are doing well.

I received your letter that you face problem either to choose college or wants to build career . I want to tell you that going for studies again is not good for you because if you choose studies that may effect on your future time , I believe you should go for get a job because now it's good time get flied that helps you to build your life stability and making home ,parents to be proud on you .

Moreover, starts a career help you to stand in society and build your status among residents.

In addition, you may choose job that's suite your background and in my opinion you've to go for business marketing and journalism .

because you are very good in that .

I hope this letter may clarify your doubts and would get your reply back soon .

Yours truly,

SIMRANJOT SINGH

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt, providing reasons why college might not be suitable, the benefits of working, and specific job suggestions. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited. For instance, the explanation of why college would 'effect on your future time' is vague and lacks depth. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your points with more specific examples or personal reasoning. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, and your position is clear throughout the response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the introduction to the advice and suggestions. You use some basic cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'In addition' to link your ideas. However, the paragraphing is insufficient; the entire body of the letter is presented as a single block, which makes it harder to follow. Improving your use of paragraph breaks to separate distinct ideas would significantly enhance the structure. Additionally, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or repetitive, which prevents the flow from being entirely natural.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your message clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'career', 'stability', and 'society'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choices and collocations, such as 'get flied' (likely meant 'get a job') and 'making home'. These errors occasionally cause the reader to pause. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and using more precise vocabulary to express your thoughts, rather than relying on direct translations or simplified phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('starts a career help'), missing articles, and incorrect verb forms ('you've to go for'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas and periods. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement will help you achieve a higher score.

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