Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Raveena,

Hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to give suggetion to you about the getting the job as you are confusing between your college and job.

Undoubtedly, our master's have been completed last month and now there is a time to put our knowledge into practies. Additionally, we have to reduce the burden of our parents by contribute in the household expenses.

Furthermore, commerce is your major subject which helps you to get a demandable job of current era that allow to flex knowledge in a productive way as well as live a lavish life with family after becoming economically strong.

In my opinion, Online marketing field would be best placement for you because you have practice of making promoitional content to advert tge produict and services of business by using yours superior creative platform that is "Canva".

I hope you would considered my recommendation.

Kind regards,

Raman

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: it explains why college might not be ideal, why working is beneficial, and suggests a specific job. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of why the friend would not enjoy college is vague, focusing more on the transition to work rather than the drawbacks of further study. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, and the purpose is clear throughout. To improve, you should expand on your reasoning with more specific examples or personal anecdotes to fully develop your arguments.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Additionally', 'Furthermore', and 'In my opinion' to link your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally hindered by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as in the second paragraph. The use of referencing is generally clear, but the overall progression of ideas could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence flows naturally into the next would help elevate your score in this criterion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'economically strong', 'productive', and 'promotional content'. However, there are several instances of incorrect word choice and spelling errors, such as 'suggetion' instead of 'suggestion', 'practies' for 'practice', and 'advert tge produict' which is quite distracting. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure you proofread your work to eliminate basic spelling mistakes and ensure word forms are used correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of your writing. Examples include 'as you are confusing between your college and job' (should be 'confused'), 'our master's have been completed' (should be 'master's degree'), and 'I hope you would considered' (should be 'consider'). These errors are persistent throughout the text. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these slips prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on subject-verb agreement and correct verb tense usage.

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