Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.
Write a letter to this friend. In your letter
- say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
- explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
- suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Dear Sir,
I hope this letter finds you well. I am Amrit and I recently done my Masters. Today I am writing this letter in order to teach my own language to your kids. I saw an advertisement that posted on Instagram and I am interested in this job.
Commencing with the reason, why this job is suitable for me?, in these days I am looking for the job in order to manage my expense. I think this job is best and convenient to me because as per of given address you are living very near to my house so there would be no any issue of transportations services. Also, with the 3 years of experience I usually deal kids with very politely way and I promise you will also like my teaching way. Along with the coaching, I can also do some household works such as deep cleaning, laundry, dish washes.
The reason of wanting this job is my father's treatment. He has a serious issue with his health and I am paying his all caring fees. Due to this, I need this job. My efforts and really more than your expectations towards the job. I will available from Monday to Friday from 9:00 am to 5:00pm.
Thank you for considering my application and I will look forward for your response.
Best
Amrit
contact number- [redacted phone]
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 2.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 2.0
The response is completely off-topic. The task required you to write a letter to a friend advising them on whether to go to college or get a job. Instead, you wrote a formal job application letter to a potential employer. Because you failed to address any of the bullet points (why college is unsuitable, why a job is good, and suggesting specific jobs for your friend), the response fails to meet the requirements of the task. In an actual IELTS exam, this would result in a very low score for Task Achievement as the content does not relate to the prompt provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter is structured with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing, which provides a basic framework. However, the logical progression is hindered by the fact that the content is entirely inappropriate for the task. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Commencing with' and 'Also', the transitions feel mechanical and do not serve the purpose of the prompt. Paragraphing is present, but the ideas within the paragraphs do not support a coherent argument related to the instructions given.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors in word choice and collocation. For example, you use 'done my Masters' instead of 'completed my Master's degree' and 'deal kids with very politely way' instead of 'interact with children in a polite manner'. There are also issues with phrasing, such as 'manage my expense' and 'caring fees'. The range is sufficient to communicate basic needs, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher band scores.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with verb tenses ('I recently done'), article usage ('the job' vs 'a job'), and sentence structure ('I saw an advertisement that posted on Instagram'). You rely heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors, such as 'there would be no any issue of transportations services'. Punctuation is generally functional, but the overall control of grammar is inconsistent.
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