Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.
Write a letter to this friend. In your letter
- say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
- explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
- suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear Friends ......
I am writing a letter to my friend name bharti who is currently goes to the college but she would not going to the college she wants a job i am her childhood friend therefore i suggest her a valuable and useful job like teacher job this job not only for women infects also a man teachers job for women learning a self and teaching for students most of the people wants a comfortable and self learning job and my friend bharti she cannot doing a most hardworking job in the companies so i suggest her teacher job is a useful job for her only wants a college degree is not valuable for her and other students jobs are most crucial making money and ther things . SO, I suggest my friend bharti she knows my request .
i kindly request to my friend bharti she gets a job like teacher and be independent.
Your best friend
jyoti
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses all three bullet points, but the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. You mention why college might not be enjoyable and suggest a teaching job, but the reasoning is unclear and lacks depth. The tone is inconsistent for a letter to a friend, and the structure is quite fragmented. To improve, ensure you provide clear, logical reasons for your advice rather than repeating the same points. For example, instead of just saying a job is 'useful', explain how it provides financial independence or practical experience that college might not offer at this stage.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter lacks a clear paragraph structure, which makes it difficult to follow. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; sentences are often strung together without logical transitions. For instance, the transition between discussing college and suggesting a job is abrupt. To improve, use paragraphing to separate your points (one for why college is not ideal, one for the benefits of working, and one for job suggestions). Use linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'on the other hand' to help the reader navigate your arguments.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, with several word-choice errors that hinder clarity, such as 'infects' instead of 'in fact' and 'ther things'. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on simple descriptors like 'useful' and 'good'. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more precise language related to career choices and education. For example, instead of 'hardworking job', you could use 'demanding role' or 'physically taxing position'. Focus on using words accurately in context to avoid confusion.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('she currently goes', 'she cannot doing'), tense usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, which makes the text difficult to read. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb. Practice using simple, correct sentences before attempting more complex structures. Pay close attention to verb forms and avoid run-on sentences by using full stops to separate distinct ideas.
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