Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mihir,

I hope you are doing great. I am thrilled to assist you to opt the best option for your career.

To begin with, the education is a key to success. Nevertheless, the way you already invested your 20 years to study the subjects will might be felt bore to continue. Even though, nowadays, in market companies provide training sessions before initiates the work which redundants the necessary education.

To be stepped into real job competition early will acquire you the practical experience at young age. Consequently, you can grow faster and the independent life will be commenced to live from financial perspective as soon as you are being hired.

Furthermore, I would highly recommend you to apply a job in IT sector. Since the advancement of technology, employers are more looking for high skilled designers. Henceforth, being a certified software designer you can easily obtain the job.

I hope this information will be handy to you for your bright future.

Warms regard,

Binay.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.5
Coherence and Cohesion6.5
Lexical Resource6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.5
Overall6.0

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly explain why college might be tedious after years of study, the benefits of gaining practical experience, and you suggest the IT sector as a suitable career path. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, some ideas are slightly under-developed; for instance, the explanation regarding why companies provide training could be more clearly linked to the specific advice you are giving. Overall, the task is fulfilled, and the position is consistent throughout the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, each focusing on a specific requirement of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Consequently', and 'Furthermore' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'Henceforth' in the context of suggesting a job. Additionally, the flow between sentences within paragraphs could be smoother to improve the overall progression of ideas. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different points of your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, including terms like 'career', 'practical experience', and 'IT sector'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'opt the best option', 'will might be felt bore', and 'redundants the necessary education'. These errors occasionally hinder the precision of your message. While you attempt to use more sophisticated vocabulary, the lack of control over these items prevents a higher score. Focusing on common collocations will help improve your clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex constructions, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'will might be felt bore', 'before initiates the work', and 'apply a job'. Subject-verb agreement and tense usage are inconsistent, for example, 'the independent life will be commenced to live'. These errors are noticeable and sometimes require the reader to re-read to understand the intended meaning, though they do not completely impede communication. Increasing your accuracy in basic sentence construction is recommended.

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