Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear ram,

Hello ! How are u? I hope you are doing great. I received your mail yesterday regarding u want a suggestion regarding future plans towards study or job. According to me ,job is a good option for u.

As u know that after graduation, I started a job as a customer service in our nearby bank branch. I also know about your family background there is nobody to help your mother and small sister financially.Due to that burden,I can understand u can’t focus on your further studies.

According to me,starting a job in related fields in your studies is the best opportunity.There is one company that started hiring new employees without any past experience because they newly developing in our area.so, it is the right time to apply for manager position there. I know u have all the skills and knowledge related that job which will be useful for you rather than wasting time on further studies.It not only helps you financially but also a better role for future opportunities.

I already suggest u a job that opened already and there are some more jobs u can easily handle with that job like online customer service and weekend jobs like receptionist and data analyst which are high dimanding nowadays.

I hope you finds this letter helpful. I want to see u soon after my busy schedule is over.

Your friend,

Aman

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly explain why college might not be suitable given your friend's financial situation, provide a logical argument for why working is a better alternative, and suggest specific job roles. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited; for instance, suggesting a 'manager position' for someone without experience is slightly unrealistic, which affects the persuasiveness of your advice. To improve, ensure your suggestions are more grounded in reality to make the advice more practical and convincing for the reader.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, each focusing on a specific part of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Due to that burden' and 'It not only helps you... but also'. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by informal phrasing and some mechanical transitions. The use of 'According to me' is repetitive and slightly unnatural in this context. To reach a higher band, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the progression between sentences is smoother, avoiding overly simplistic sentence-to-sentence connections.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'financially', 'opportunity', and 'customer service'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and informal abbreviations, such as 'u' instead of 'you' and 'mail' instead of 'letter'. Additionally, phrases like 'high dimanding' (demanding) show spelling errors. To improve, avoid text-speak and focus on using more precise collocations. For example, instead of saying 'newly developing', you could use 'newly established' or 'expanding'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'regarding u want a suggestion' (regarding your request for a suggestion), 'there is nobody to help' (where a relative clause would be better), and 'I already suggest u a job' (I have already suggested). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around punctuation marks. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they occur frequently enough to limit your score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage.

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