Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Jay,

I have read your email regarding the next step that suits your future either job or college.

As per my concern you should start looking for the job becuase you already have your bachelors degree and that is enough to land the starting job as analyst , as well, there is one reason that if you opt to pursue your master degree it will take 2 years to complete till then you will be at some seniour position in any multinational company. You can choose wide range of carrer like data analyst, business analyst and data scientist as this all carrers have same basic requirements to conquer your interview.

This is the decision that should be taken by you, becuase if helps to build your future so this is what i think but please take 2-3 days time for making decision and also see the pros and cons of the both things. I will always support you in any decision that you choose for your dream.

Yours faithfully,

Shivam Patel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points, though the development is somewhat uneven. You explain why a job is a good idea and suggest specific roles like 'data analyst'. However, the first bullet point—why he would not enjoy college—is not explicitly addressed. You mention that a master's degree takes two years, but you do not explain why he would find the experience of college unenjoyable or unsuitable. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a friend, although the closing 'Yours faithfully' is incorrect for a friend; 'Best wishes' or 'Yours sincerely' would be more suitable for this context.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into three paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, the phrase 'As per my concern' is not a standard way to introduce an opinion, and the transition 'as well, there is one reason that' is clunky. The logical flow between sentences is sometimes hindered by these awkward transitions. While the overall message is clear, the paragraphing and linking of ideas could be more sophisticated to improve the flow of the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'multinational company', 'analyst', and 'pros and cons'. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'becuase', 'seniour', 'carrer', and 'carrers'. Additionally, some word choices are slightly unnatural, such as 'conquer your interview' (which should be 'ace' or 'succeed in') and 'land the starting job'. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they limit the score as they indicate a lack of precision and control over spelling and collocation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the accuracy of your writing. Examples include 'looking for the job' (should be 'a job'), 'if helps to build' (should be 'it helps'), and 'see the pros and cons of the both things' (should be 'both things'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While you attempt complex sentences, the frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction is noticeable, though they do not completely impede communication.

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