Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Raman,

I'm writing to your recent letter and want to give you advice to join online college program along with a part time job.

In term of study, I know very well that you wouldn't like to travel alot to college everyday from your village also the higher accommodation costs wouldn't allow you to live in a city. I'ld suggest you to get enroll in an online program, where you don't need to go in-person. Not only time, you would save money as well, if you will follow my suggestion.

There are different online platforms where you can find a job, such as indeed, which would help you to pay your own bills. You will manage your tuition fee without burdening your parents. Instead you can

As you have good interpersonal skills you should try to find a receptionist job where you will get great opportunity to improve your computer skills.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have addressed all three bullet points, but the development of your ideas is inconsistent. While you mention why college might be difficult (travel and costs) and suggest a job (receptionist), the response is incomplete. The sentence 'Instead you can' is left unfinished, and the overall structure feels fragmented. To reach a higher band, ensure that every point is fully explained with coherent sentences. You also shifted the focus slightly by suggesting an online college program, whereas the prompt asked you to advise on whether to go to college or get a job. Staying strictly to the prompt's premise is essential for a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is divided into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical. There are issues with logical flow, particularly where the text breaks off abruptly. The transition between the advice about college and the advice about jobs is somewhat disjointed. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'on the other hand') to connect your ideas more fluidly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, completed focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You use basic terms like 'good interpersonal skills' and 'pay your own bills', which are functional but not sophisticated. There are also minor errors in word choice, such as 'get enroll' instead of 'enroll' or 'get enrolled'. To improve, try to incorporate more topic-specific collocations related to career advice and education, and ensure that your word forms are grammatically accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'I'm writing to your recent letter' (should be 'writing regarding' or 'writing in response to'), 'travel alot' (spelling: 'a lot'), and 'I'ld suggest you to get enroll' (incorrect verb pattern: 'I would suggest that you enroll'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focus on mastering basic verb patterns and proofreading for spelling and preposition errors.

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