Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Alan,

I am writing this letter to recommend you that you should prefer job over the college

As you have already completed your masters and for the doctorate, it will take another 6 years by then you will turn 32 and as the technology is so vast you will be more pressurised to get the good score.

According to today's condition as you have heard in the news that even the doctorate persons are not getting the job. This is only time when you can launch yourself into the market even though if you will not get the job immediately, you will not be burdened but if after 6 years you will be in certain situation then you will definitely face a lot of issues.

I would like to suggest some jobs, as you have completed the masters in technology , you can go for the IT companies. If you do not like the job away from your home you can also become teacher and teach college students by doing that you will be in touch with the studies as well.

If you need my help you can call me anytime. Best Wishes for your better future.

Yours sincerely,

Alex

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the prompt, providing reasons why college might be unsuitable, the benefits of working, and specific job suggestions. Your position is clear throughout the letter. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the explanation regarding the job market is a bit vague, and the suggestion to become a teacher could be more detailed in terms of why it suits your friend's specific background. To reach a higher band, ensure that your arguments are fully extended with more specific examples or logical consequences, rather than relying on general statements about the economy or future pressure.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'as you have already', 'according to', and 'if you do not like'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the transition between the second and third paragraphs feels abrupt. The use of referencing is generally clear, but some sentences are slightly disjointed. To improve, try to use a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more fluidly, ensuring that the relationship between your arguments is explicitly stated.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'pressurised', 'burdened', and 'launch yourself into the market'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'recommend you that you should prefer job' (should be 'recommend that you choose a job') and 'doctorate persons' (should be 'people with a doctorate' or 'PhD holders'). These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that your word choices are natural in the context of a friendly letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'as the technology is so vast you will be more pressurised to get the good score' (missing articles and awkward phrasing) and 'even though if you will not get the job' (incorrect usage of 'even though'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma placement. While these errors rarely prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to keep the score in the 6.0 range. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of conjunctions will help improve your accuracy.

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