Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear friend,

Hello! how are you? I hope you and your family will be fine. I got your letter and I am writing this letter to suggestion about to make choice between career or further study.

Well, You have completed your master in computer science and I think you need to focus on your professional career. Moreover, you have to not only leave city for further education but, also have to bear extra expenses like accommodation. You might not enjoy that process.

Apart from that, I would advice you find a suitable job according to financial conditions. I do not think you can afford collage fee because of your parents just lost their income resource. Nowadays IT sector has great demand and you can access a suitable position in any company.

Lastly, you have to care your family in this hard condition. With the help of earning income you can support your family and make their life comfortable. I hope my suggestion will help you to make right decision at this critical situation.

Best of luck.

Yours lovingly,

Navjot.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt, providing reasons why college might not be enjoyable, explaining the benefits of working, and suggesting suitable job types. Your position is clear throughout the letter. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, while you mention the IT sector, you could have provided more specific examples of roles or companies to make your advice more practical and persuasive. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is fully extended with more detailed explanations or personal context, which would help in achieving a more comprehensive response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the introduction to the specific advice and concluding with a supportive closing. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Apart from that', and 'Lastly' to link your ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes a bit mechanical, and the paragraphing could be more distinct to separate the different points of advice more clearly. The referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to create a more natural, cohesive tone.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'professional career', 'financial conditions', and 'IT sector'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'I am writing this letter to suggestion' (should be 'to make a suggestion') and 'care your family' (should be 'take care of your family'). To improve, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary and ensure that phrases are used in their standard idiomatic forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'you have to not only leave city' (should be 'you would not only have to leave the city'), 'collage fee' (spelling error: 'college'), and 'your parents just lost' (should be 'your parents have just lost'). These errors do not impede communication, but they are noticeable. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and ensuring that complex sentence structures are grammatically sound.

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