Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear John,

I hope you are doing well. I recently got your letter and I would happy to give you a suggestion on choosing a job rather than course at college. Since you occupied your bachelor's degree from University of Manitoba, you should focus on securing a professional job which will facilitate you to earn handsome amount of money which is the major requirement of human's lives.

In addition, I saw an advertisement in the newspaper showing that plenty of companies are hiring for professional worker due to high demand of not only technology but also AI. Thus, it will assist you to obtain a job as a AI technician without putting much efforts as you have degree.

However, nowadays, colleges are offering some courses which required full attendance to obtain completion certificate which will not allows you to do even part-time job to support your basic expenses. Hence, you will not going to enjoy study since having some restrictions on work.

Please let me know if you have further questions.

Kind regards,

Derek

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt, providing reasons why college might not be enjoyable, why working is beneficial, and suggesting a specific job type. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation regarding why college is not enjoyable focuses primarily on attendance restrictions rather than the broader academic experience. To reach a higher band, you should aim to expand on your points with more depth and personal reasoning, ensuring the advice feels more tailored to the friend's situation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In addition', 'Thus', and 'However' to link your ideas. However, some of these transitions feel slightly mechanical or are used with minor grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'Hence, you will not going to enjoy study'. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing is more precise throughout the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'facilitate', 'professional', and 'advertisement'. There are some instances of awkward word choice or collocation, such as 'occupied your bachelor's degree' (should be 'obtained' or 'completed') and 'handsome amount of money' (which is slightly informal/cliché). While your vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, there is a lack of more sophisticated or precise language that would be expected at higher bands. Focus on using more natural collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as 'I would happy to' (missing 'be'), 'human's lives' (should be 'human life' or 'people's lives'), and 'a AI technician' (should be 'an AI'). Additionally, the phrase 'you will not going to enjoy study' contains a tense error. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to impact the overall fluency and accuracy of your writing.

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