Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Jhon,

I am writing this email to that you are confuse either doing masters or searching new job.

Firstly, I received your letter, I am happy that you and your family are doing well and you finished your graduation. I feel that it is better to join any organization instead of attending university classes, because you would not enjoy going to college, also you feel tired and frustrated while attending classes. I also remember that you do not have any friend who is taking the same stream with you which will bother you a lot.

Apart from this, I would like to advice you that getting a job will give you comfort and independence in your life, and you can learn new skills while working. Further, you can earn good amount of money which you can not only save but also invest that and earn profit. You should get success in your career, if you starts working at your early age.

Finally, I know you very well, you can apply for call centers as well as any retail job where you could work easily due to you have good communication skills, and where you get promotions too.

I hope my advice will aid to decide what you want to further in your career.

Kind Regards,

Smith.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly state why college might not be enjoyable, explain the benefits of working, and suggest specific job types. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited; for instance, the explanation regarding why your friend would not enjoy college relies on assumptions about their social life and feelings of frustration rather than more substantial arguments. To reach a higher band, ensure that your supporting points are more fully developed and logically connected to the main advice provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Apart from this', and 'Finally' to transition between ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing, such as the opening sentence: 'I am writing this email to that you are confuse'. The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, which makes the progression of ideas feel slightly mechanical. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that sentences connect more naturally would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'independence', 'frustrated', and 'invest'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and unnatural collocations, such as 'doing masters', 'searching new job', and 'aid to decide'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do indicate a limited control over more sophisticated lexical items. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that your word choices are grammatically accurate within the context of the sentence.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'I am writing this email to that you are confuse' (missing verb/incorrect structure), 'you do not have any friend who is taking the same stream with you' (unnatural phrasing), and 'if you starts working' (subject-verb agreement error). These errors are noticeable and occur regularly. To achieve a higher score, you should focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and refining your sentence construction to reduce the frequency of these slips.

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